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Smoking harms not only the smoker but also those who are close by. Smoking, therefore, should not be allowed at public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement.

Smoking harms not only the smoker but also those who are close by. Smoking, therefore, should not be allowed at public places. with the statement. WGp2b
Smoking Should not be allowed at public places as it is injurious to health. I am totally in favour of the given statement and will give substantiate the details in following sentences. To commence with, Main content of Tobacco smoking is nicotine, which the dangerous as well as highly addictive substance. It increases blood pressure, heart rate, which further leads to narrowing of arteries. when a person smokes harmful gases are inhaled by both the person who smokes as well as the nearby person. It therefore creates problems for the person who unknowingly inhale the gases. Pregnant women and Children are also affected by it. Since, it is addictive people continue to smoke for long time and which further leads to cancer in mouth. Government should ban smoking in public place. Since school, colleges and in cafe and in hospitals there are many children and who suffer alot by standing nearby to the person who smokes. Even it give an example to children and teenagers to smoke as they see adult are smoking in front of them. even infants may develop asthma because of inhalation of these products. in several bars and public places special smoking area is reserved. However in many countries government gets high income on the taxes imposed on selling cigarette. further banning may leads to closing to pubs and bars, which reduce economic. Conclusively I believe smoking is dangerous and benefits can't overcome it's hazards so it should be banned immediately in public places
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as it is injurious to health. I am
totally
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of the
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statement and will give substantiate the
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in following sentences.

To commence with, Main content of Tobacco
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smoking
is nicotine, which the
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dangerous
as well
as
highly
addictive substance. It increases blood pressure, heart rate, which
further
leads to narrowing of arteries.
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when
a
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person
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smokes
harmful gases
are inhaled
by both the
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person
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who
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smokes
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as well as
the nearby
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person
. It
therefore
creates problems for the
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person
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who
unknowingly
inhale the gases. Pregnant women and Children are
also
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affected
by it.

Since, it is addictive
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people
continue to
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smoke
for long time and which
further
leads to cancer in mouth.

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Government
should ban
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smoking
in
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public
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place
. Since school, colleges and in
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cafe
and in hospitals there are
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many
children and
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who
suffer
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alot
by standing nearby to the
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person
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who
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smokes
. Even it give an example to children and
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teenagers
to
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smoke
as they
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adult are
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smoking
in front of them.
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even
infants may develop asthma
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because
of inhalation of these products.
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in
several bars and
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public
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places
special
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smoking
area
is reserved
.

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in
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countries
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gets
high income on the taxes imposed on selling cigarette.
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further
banning may leads to closing to pubs and bars, which
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reduce
economic.

Conclusively
I believe
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smoking
is
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dangerous
and benefits can't overcome
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it's
hazards
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it should
be banned
immediately in
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IELTS essay Smoking harms not only the smoker but also those who are close by. Smoking, therefore, should not be allowed at public places. with the statement.

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