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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. mRdK
Nowadays international sports events demands high investments. However, huge number of people tracks these events and the locations that where happened. A sport country like France has so many visitors from the other countries. Big sports events has also big economic incomes like sponsorships. All that sponsors can also help to organization. Unfortunately a big event needs a big care and capital that to make it happen. First of all sports fans are so enthusiastic to visit sports events. Big number of people visit states which has big events like motorsports. They are not only watch the event and go back to their country, but also they visit other spots of the country that organize the sport event. These thousands of people spend a lot of foreign money in organizator country. As a result it can be a big economic benefit of a sport event. Another benefit of sports events is media awareness. Specially a global event can be watched from over of 100 country. That makes millions of people aware from your contry. It would bue a good people relations move. On the other hand, huge organizations needs huge investments. For example a motorsport events needs a high standart circuit. A circuit's asphalt needs to have high standard and that means millions of dollars. Despite of that your location of sports event must has great sheltering options. The hotels that supports your event must budget friendly. Eventually, having a sport complex doesn't good enough. These all opinions depends on the country's goals. If a country has a capital for commercial, sports would be a great choice at last. But a government which has different priorities an international event will not make people happy. In my opinion, governments are for take that hard decisions correctly
Nowadays international
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sports
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events
demands high investments.
However
, huge number of
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people
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tracks
these
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events
and the locations that where happened. A
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sport
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country
like France has
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so
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many
visitors from the other
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countries
.
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Big
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sports
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events
has
also
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big
economic incomes like sponsorships. All that sponsors can
also
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help
to organization. Unfortunately a
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big
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event
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needs
a
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big
care and capital that to
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make
it happen.

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First of all
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sports
fans are
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so
enthusiastic to visit
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sports
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events
.
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Big
number of
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people
visit states which has
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big
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events
like motorsports. They are not
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only
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watch
the
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event
and go back to their
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country
,
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but
also
they visit other spots of the
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country
that organize the
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sport
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event
. These thousands of
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people
spend
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a lot of
foreign money in
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organizator
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country
.
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As
a result it can be a
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big
economic benefit of a
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sport
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event
. Another benefit of
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sports
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events
is media awareness.
Specially
a global
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event
can be
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watched
from over of 100
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country
. That
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makes
millions of
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people
aware from your
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contry
. It would
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bue
a
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good
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people
relations
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move
.

On the other hand
, huge organizations
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needs
huge investments.
For example
a motorsport
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events
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needs
a high
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standart
circuit. A circuit's asphalt
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needs
to have high standard and that means millions of dollars.
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Despite of
that your location of
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sports
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event
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must
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has
great sheltering options. The hotels that supports your
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event
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must
budget friendly.
Eventually
, having a
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sport
complex doesn't
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good
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enough
.

These all opinions
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depends
on the country's goals. If a
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country
has a capital for commercial,
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sports
would be a great choice at last.
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But
a
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government
which has
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different
priorities an international
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event
will not
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make
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people
happy. In my opinion,
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governments
are for take that
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hard
decisions
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correctly
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IELTS essay Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad.

Essay
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