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Smacking children is the best way to discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Slapping children is the most popular way to teach discipline. Children behaviour can be controlled in many ways but some people choose to punish them physically. This essay will argue that smacking children is completely unacceptable. On the one hand, there are many reasons why parents feel that smacking is the best form of discipline. Parents prevent them from doing bad behaviour by giving physical punishments. Unfortunately, smacking does not help with behavioural issues of children. Rather, it makes their problems worse. Studies have shown that children who grow up household where they are regularly subjected to smacking are more likely to grow as aggressive. Thus, they start to misbehave with the elderly. When parents spank their children, this, perhaps, will not bring the best outcome. On the other hand, while it is important to discipline children, behavioural problems need to be dealt with love and care. Instead of physical penalty parents should set an example for their children that is enjoyable and educative. For example, a toddler could be taught valuable lessons about etiquette and manners by letting them watch educative cartoons. If the first caregivers behave appropriately at all times as well as provide the toddlers with the opportunity to acquire effective lessons about behaviour through entertainment, children will gradually imitate what they are being introduced to, and which will solve the issue. To conclude, children are the future of our nation and must grow them with love and tolerance. In my opinion, spanking children must be forbidden, instead, they should be treated with fondness
Slapping
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is the most popular way to teach discipline.
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behaviour
can
be controlled
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ways
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but
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some
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people
choose to punish them
physically
. This essay will argue that smacking
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children
is completely unacceptable.

On the one hand, there are
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many
reasons why
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parents
feel that smacking is the best form of discipline.
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Parents
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prevent
them from doing
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bad
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behaviour
by giving physical punishments. Unfortunately, smacking does not
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help
with
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behavioural
issues of
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children
.
Rather
, it
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makes
their problems worse. Studies have shown that
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children
who grow up household where they are
regularly
subjected to smacking are more likely to grow as aggressive.
Thus
, they
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start
to misbehave with the elderly. When
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parents
spank their
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children
, this, perhaps, will not bring the best outcome.

On the other hand
, while it is
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important
to discipline
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children
,
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behavioural
problems need to
be dealt
with
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love
and care.
Instead
of physical penalty
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parents
should set an example for their
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children
that is
enjoyable and educative.
For example
, a toddler could
be taught
valuable lessons about etiquette and manners by letting them
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
educative cartoons. If the
first
caregivers behave
appropriately
at all times
as well
as provide the toddlers with the opportunity to acquire effective lessons about
Possible spelling mistake. ‘behaviour’ is British English.
behaviour
through entertainment,
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children
will
gradually
imitate what they are
being introduced
to, and which will solve the issue.

To conclude
,
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children
are the future of our nation and
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must
grow them with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and tolerance. In my opinion, spanking
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children
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must
be forbidden
,
instead
, they should
be treated
with
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fondness
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IELTS essay Smacking children is the best way to discipline.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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