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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced

Pictures illustrate the process of making chocolate. Overall, it is clear that there are ten different steps in chocolate production, from growing the cacao tree in South America, Africa and Indonesia to producing liquid chocolate. First of all, when the pods are ripe and red, they are harvested, and then white cacao beans are removed from the outer shells. In the next two steps, the beans are fermented and spread in the sun for drying. After that, the dry beans are put in large packages to send them to the factory by a lorry or train. Once the bags with beans have been taken to the factory, they are roasted at 350 C in a hot pot, and then the beans are crushed as well as the outer shells are removed at the same time. In the final step, liquid chocolate is produced by pressing the inner part of the beans.

Pictures illustrate the process of making chocolate.

Overall
, it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that there are ten This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 steps in chocolate production, from growing the cacao tree in South America, Africa and Indonesia to producing liquid chocolate.

Often, this adverbial phrase is redundant. Consider using “first”.First
First of all
, when the pods are ripe and red, they are harvested
, and then white cacao You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
are removed
 from the outer shells. In the next
 two steps, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
are fermented
 and spread in the sun for drying. After that, the dry You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
are put
 in large packages to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 them to the factory by a ‘lorry’ is a common British expression. Consider using expressions more common to American English.truck
lorry
 or train.

Once the bags with You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
 have been taken
 to the factory, they are roasted
 at 350 C in a hot pot, and then the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
are crushed
as well
 as the outer shells are removed
 at the same time. In the final step, liquid chocolate is produced
 by pressing the inner part of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
. 