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Sleep in a quiet room or not.

Sleep in a quiet room or not. AjWbM
Sleep it's one of our basic needs. Everybody needs to sleep at least some hours every day to ensure their wellbeing. However every person has different ways and habits to sleep and not all can get into bed, close their eyes and automatically nod off till next day. Firstly, some people have severe problems to sleep and when they finally do it, they end waking for the slightly sound and get troubles to sleep again. Therefore they need a place like a quiet room or a bedroom with no noise and no light so they can go to sleep peacefully. Secondly, other people don't have that type of problem at all, they can sleep on a quiet room as well as noisy place and there is not gonna be any difference in their sleep schedule. Finally, I got use to sleep with a noisy background since I was a kid so I never care too much while I have a bed.
Sleep
it's one of our basic needs. Everybody needs to
sleep
at least
some
hours every day to ensure their
wellbeing
.
However
every person has
different
ways and habits to
sleep
and not all can
get
into bed, close their eyes and
automatically
nod off till
next
day.

Firstly
,
some
people
have severe problems to
sleep
and when they
finally
do it, they
end
waking for the
slightly
sound and
get
troubles to
sleep
again.
Therefore
they need a place like a quiet room or a bedroom with no noise and no light
so
they can go to
sleep
peacefully
.

Secondly
, other
people
don't have that type of problem at all, they can
sleep
on a quiet room
as well
as noisy place and there is not
gonna
be any difference in their
sleep
schedule.

Finally
, I
got
use to
sleep
with a noisy background since I was a kid
so
I never care too much while I have a bed.
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IELTS essay Sleep in a quiet room or not.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
161 words
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