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Since the dawn of human civilisation, poverty has always been a grave concern that is upsurging with each passing day at an alarming rate. In my opinion, an inclination in illiteracy and unemployment are the biggest reasons behind this menace that can be curbed by providing jobs’ opportunities and free education to poor ones.

Since the dawn of human civilisation, poverty has always been a grave concern that is upsurging with each passing day at an alarming rate. In my opinion, an inclination in illiteracy and unemployment are the biggest reasons behind this menace that can be curbed by providing jobs’ opportunities and free education to poor ones. 2bORM
Since the dawn of human civilisation, poverty has always been a grave concern that is upsurging with each passing day at an alarming rate. In my opinion, an inclination in illiteracy and unemployment are the biggest reasons behind this menace that can be curbed by providing jobs’ opportunities and free education to poor ones. To begin with, plenty of factors are aggravating this issue. The first and foremost is, illiteracy. More specifically, in contemporary days, illiterateness is roaring day by day owing to which people are unable to get jobs’ opportunities. Moreover, if they are employed then they are hardly getting enough to make their both ends meet. The Second reason is depriving of quality education. Comprehensively, in number of nations, underprivileged people are still devoid of quality education due to which they are lacking in those aspects that are necessary for a good job. Thirdly, some developing are diverting money on civil wars as well as terrorism because of which their citizens are becoming poorer. To get around this trouble, it should be government onus to help needy ones by providing them essential facilities. I believe, green flags should be given to more and more educational institutes so that poor people can get free as well as quality education since education is the basis pillar towards nation’s health and prosperity. Moreover, ministry ought to open skill development centres where such people can learn vocational as well as practical skill to foster their lives. Last but not the least, free homes should be announced for poor people if government has enough or surplus funds. To conclude, undeniably, poverty has become a demon these days that is gulping a number of lives. Hence, I think, by producing jobs’ and quality education, this problem can be suppressed.
Since the dawn of human
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civilisation
, poverty has always been a grave concern
that is
upsurging with each passing day at an alarming rate. In my opinion, an inclination in illiteracy and unemployment are the biggest reasons behind this menace that can
be curbed
by providing
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jobs’
opportunities and free
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education
to poor ones.

To
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begin
with,
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plenty
of factors are aggravating this issue. The
first
and foremost is, illiteracy. More
specifically
, in contemporary days,
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illiterateness
is roaring day by day owing to which
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people
are unable to
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get
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jobs’
opportunities.
Moreover
, if they
are employed
then they are hardly getting
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enough
to
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make
their both ends
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meet
. The Second reason is depriving of
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quality
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education
.
Comprehensively
, in number of nations, underprivileged
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people
are
still
devoid of
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quality
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education
due to which they are lacking in those aspects that are necessary for a
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good
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job
.
Thirdly
,
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some
developing are diverting money on civil wars
as well
as terrorism
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because
of which their citizens are becoming poorer.

To
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get
around this trouble, it should be
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government
onus to
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help
needy ones by providing them essential facilities. I believe, green flags should be
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given
to more and more educational institutes
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so
that poor
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people
can
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get
free
as well
as
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quality
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education
since
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education
is the basis pillar towards nation’s health and prosperity.
Moreover
, ministry ought to open
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skill
development
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centres
where such
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people
can learn vocational
as well
as practical
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skill
to foster their
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lives
. Last
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but
not the least, free homes should
be announced
for poor
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people
if
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government
has
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enough
or surplus funds.

To conclude
,
undeniably
, poverty has become a demon these days
that is
gulping a number of
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lives
.
Hence
, I
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think
, by producing
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jobs’
and
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quality
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education
, this problem can
be suppressed
.
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IELTS essay Since the dawn of human civilisation, poverty has always been a grave concern that is upsurging with each passing day at an alarming rate. In my opinion, an inclination in illiteracy and unemployment are the biggest reasons behind this menace that can be curbed by providing jobs’ opportunities and free education to poor ones.

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