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Since the beginning of the 21st century, people have changed their lifestyle, where most of them now live in big cities.

Since the beginning of the 21st century, people have changed their lifestyle, where most of them now live in big cities. Some people believe that these movements will prevent grandparents from spending time with their grandchildren, so they assume this will suppress transferring traditions and habits from the upper generation to the lower generation, while others argue that this will improve people characters. This essay will discuss the consequences of stopping the meeting between the grandchildren and their grandparents. Firstly, the major consequence of this phenomenon is the heritage will not move to the following generation. Some families have some special traditions which present the symbols of their families. For example, in Jordan, due to lack of meeting between the grandparents and the grandchildren, the youth do not speak the language of their grandparents. Therefore, it this will lead to losing the cultures and heritages of some families. On the other hand, stop meeting between grandchildren and their grandparent will lead to enhancing some characters. Grandchildren will improve their characters based on their surroundings rather than their traditions. For example, grandchildren in Jordan now they learn new habits which are suitable for their environment. Thus, preventing the meeting between grandparents and grandchildren will have a good consequence. In conclusion, spending little time with grandparents could have either a positive or a negative consequence. In my opinion, I believe that heritages and traditions are very important.
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people
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their lifestyle, where most of them
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now
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live
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people
believe that these movements will
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prevent
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grandparents
from spending time with their grandchildren,
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so
they assume this will suppress transferring
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traditions
and habits from the upper generation to the lower generation, while others argue that this will
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improve
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people
characters. This essay will discuss the consequences of stopping the
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meeting
between the grandchildren and their grandparents.

Firstly
, the major consequence of this phenomenon is the heritage will not
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move
to the following generation.
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Some
families have
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some
special
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traditions
which present the symbols of their families.
For example
, in Jordan, due to lack of
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meeting
between the
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grandparents
and the grandchildren, the youth do not speak the language of their
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grandparents
.
Therefore
, it this will lead to losing the cultures and heritages of
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some
families.

On the other hand
,
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stop
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meeting
between grandchildren and their
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grandparent
will lead to enhancing
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some
characters. Grandchildren will
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improve
their characters based on their surroundings
rather
than their
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traditions
.
For example
, grandchildren in Jordan
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now
they learn new habits which are suitable for their environment.
Thus
, preventing the
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meeting
between
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grandparents
and grandchildren will have a
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good
consequence.

In conclusion
, spending
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little
time with
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grandparents
could have either a
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positive
or a
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negative
consequence. In my opinion, I believe that heritages and
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traditions
are
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very
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important
.
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IELTS essay Since the beginning of the 21st century, people have changed their lifestyle, where most of them now live in big cities.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
235 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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