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Although it is widely recognized that cars damage the environment, their manufacture and use continue to increase. Why is this the case? How could this increase be controlled?

Across the globe, the automobile industry is booming, despite the fact that many people believe cars are damaging the environment. The following essay will discuss why this is occurring and what can be done to control the situation. Cars continue to be manufactured these days because they are the most popular, comfortable, and efficient form of transportation that is available to most people. If there were a better option that was more affordable, more efficient, and more widely available, then the majority of people would obviously choose it. Although electric and hybrid cars are now becoming increasingly more common, they are not currently as affordable or as available as normal combustion engine vehicles. Furthermore, the automotive and petroleum industries are multi-billion dollar industries in many countries around the world and provide millions of jobs for people and generate millions of dollars in taxes for governments, and therefore shutting those industries down would be a difficult process. However, there are some strategies that could be implemented to try to control this issue. Firstly, governments can try to promote the use and manufacture of electric vehicles and other modes of transport that do not burn fossil fuels. Governments could fund further research and design of electric automobiles that harness energy from the sun or that use other alternative forms of energy that do not pollute the earth. Governments can also encourage citizens to use bicycles more often by providing safe cycling zones on roadways, to minimise the risk of accidents with automobiles. Lastly, governments must increase the public transportation infrastructure in their countries and encourage citizens to use it more often by making it cheap and efficient. In conclusion, the main reasons that people continue to use cars is simply because it is the best option currently available for those who can afford them, and because the automobile and petroleum industries are so huge that it would cause many problems to simply dispose of them.
Across the globe, the
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automobile
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industry
is booming, despite the fact that
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many
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people
believe cars are damaging the environment. The following essay will discuss why this is occurring and what can
be done
to control the situation.

Cars continue to
be manufactured
these days
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because
they are the most popular, comfortable, and efficient form of transportation
that is
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available
to most
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people
. If there were a better option that was more affordable, more efficient, and more
widely
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available
, then the majority of
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people
would
obviously
choose it. Although electric and hybrid cars are
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now
becoming
increasingly
more common, they are not
currently
as affordable or as
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available
as normal combustion engine vehicles.
Furthermore
, the automotive and petroleum
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industries
are multi-billion dollar
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industries
in
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many
countries around the world and provide millions of jobs for
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people
and generate millions of dollars in taxes for
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governments
, and
therefore
shutting those
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industries
down would be a difficult process.

However
, there are
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some
strategies that could
be implemented
to try to control this issue.
Firstly
,
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governments
can try to promote the
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use
and manufacture of electric vehicles and other modes of transport that do not burn fossil fuels.
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Governments
could fund
further
research and design of electric
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automobiles
that harness energy from the sun or that
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use
other alternative forms of energy that do not pollute the earth.
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Governments
can
also
encourage citizens to
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use
bicycles more
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often
by providing safe cycling zones on roadways, to
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minimise
the
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risk
of accidents with
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automobiles
.
Lastly
,
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governments
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must
increase the public transportation infrastructure in their countries and encourage citizens to
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use
it more
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often
by making it
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cheap
and efficient.

In conclusion
, the main reasons that
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people
continue to
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use
cars is
simply
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because
it is the best option
currently
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available
for those who can afford them, and
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because
the
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automobile
and petroleum
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industries
are
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so
huge that it would cause
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many
problems to
simply
dispose of them.

IELTS essay Although it is widely recognized that cars damage the environment, their manufacture and use continue to increase. Why is this the case? How could this increase be controlled?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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