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showing how a woman drives to a store and back in 5 different scenarios with concrete details

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Assignment #2 Kelsey Li Assignment #2 May 22 Her husband of many years just left her. A pair of steely hands gripped the steering wheel, the knuckles turning white. Lia’s car veered off towards the highway entrance. The tires of her SUV squeaked against the smooth pavement, as the black vehicle aggressively switched lanes. Her eyes shining with tears. The tires were met with black asphalt as the car drove off an exit. The unevenly spread material and the unrelenting speed caused the car to bounce up and down. Lia’s head was met with a poorly closed plastic board, the sun visor bouncing off and leaving its painful mark on her crown. Her shoes hit the brakes violently and the car lunged forward. Honks of protest erupted from behind her, but Lia ignored them. Her head fell on the smooth leather head support. A droplet of salty liquid cascaded down her pale face. Soon, the car slowly entered the parking lot of the mall. She stumbled outside and walked straight towards SAQ. She slammed a carton of a dozen of Bud Light Limes on the counter of the checkout. The action causing the bottle caps to rattle as the liquid trembled inside the glass bottle. Stares came from all directions of the store, but they all seemed to bounce off an invisible barrier as Lia did not spare them a single glance. The cashier took notice of her dark eye bags and swollen red eyes and quickly averted her gaze. Lia grabbed the handle of the carton and quickly headed towards her car. Once she arrived, she immediately uncapped the bottle and took a swig of the cold golden liquid. Her eyes trailed on the silver ring on her ring finger that sparkled in the sunlight. She slid it off, and gently placed it on the ground of the parking lot. The ring continued to glitter in the sunlight, as Lia drove away. She just learned that she has only six months to live. Georgie’s distraught eyes stared blankly at the road. Her shaky hands clutched the wheel of the second-hand Toyota Prius, the sweat slightly soaking through the fabric. Her car pulled into the parking lot, and she slowly got out. Georgie walked to the candy section before grabbing a Kit Kat. She walked out after paying, and stepped into the sunlight. Georgie raised her head to gaze at the source of light above her. She narrowed her eyes as the sun shone upon her. Georgie kicked at a pebble and watched it roll to the exit of the parking lot. Seconds later, a car zoomed by and crushed the pebble beneath its tires. Georgie’s eyes became misty, and she quickly ran back to her car. She slammed the door shut as she ignited the car engine. Silent tears streamed down her face as the car stopped at a red light. She has to make an important speech to a large group of business associates that evening. A pair of intent eyes bore holes in the window of the car, as the Tesla Model S drifted into the shabby parking lot. Brooke got out, shutting the door of the classy white car before heading into the little tailor store. Inside she was escorted to find a suit in the dimmed room that smelled like fabric. As she was being measured for her sizes, she closed her eyes and mumbled the same words under her breath. When she took her suit and left the store, her eyes suddenly lit up. Arriving in the car, she immediately kicked off her black heels before opening her laptop on her dashboard. She furiously started typing on a powerpoint, her fingers flying over the keyboard. Her stance relaxed and she stepped on the gas pedal before reversing out of the parking lot. The dark brown liquid of now cold coffee swayed dangerously in the plastic cup. Brooke’s phone rang, her manager’s name appearing on the screen. Brooke listened intently before replying, “I’m on my way. ” She then took the entrance to the highway, looking determined. She just dropped off her best friend, who is moving across the country, at the airport. Her teeth chewed her chapped lips as Aria watched the figure that had long disappeared from the airport doors. Her head turned as a whistling sound urged her to move her car. She quickly ran back to her Land Rover Discovery and shut the doors of her black car before stepping on the acceleration pedal. Her car leaving the long line of cars and pulling onto a highway. Aria tried to stop the tears that stung in her eyes. A message suddenly flashed through her phone screen, Aria’s shoulders shook as she tried to stop the steady flow of salty liquid cascaded down her cheeks. But she still stared at the road in front of her, hands still grasping the steering wheel tightly as she headed towards the supermarket. She pulled over at Target and headed towards the kitchen garbage bags aisle. Aria’s still glossy eyes scanned the products before grabbing a box of 24 garbage bags. After paying for her purchase, she exited the store and climbed in her car. Puffy eyes gazing out the window as she reversed out of the driveway. She is trying to decide between adopting a puppy or a kitten from the local rescue. Irene chewed on the nail of her left hand as her right gripped the steering wheel of her BMW X6. Her teeth leaving uneven bite marks on her nails as she gnawed on them. Her car slowly pulled into the parking lot, as a few honks announced their annoyance at her tremendously slow pace. Irene opened the window before waving her hand in apology to the cars behind her. She opened the door of her car and ran into the pet store. She paced around the store before stopping at the treats section. Her eyes moved nervously from the cats’ snack section to the dogs’ section. Her hand levitated in the air as she continued to gaze at the two types of treats. Soon enough Irene slammed a packet of treats on the counter and handed the cashier her credit card. She got back in her car, throwing the pack of treats in the back seat along with a cage and blankets before pulling out of the parking lot. She drove off, with a half guilty look, half excited look on her face.
Assignment #2

Kelsey Li

Assignment #2

May 22

Her husband of
many
years
just
left
her.

A pair of steely
hands
gripped the steering
wheel
, the knuckles turning white.
Lia
’s
car
veered
off
towards the highway entrance. The tires of her SUV squeaked against the smooth pavement, as the black vehicle
aggressively
switched lanes. Her
eyes
shining with tears. The tires
were met
with black asphalt as the
car
drove
off
an exit. The
unevenly
spread material and the unrelenting speed caused the
car
to bounce up and
down
.
Lia
’s head
was met
with a
poorly
closed plastic board, the sun visor bouncing
off
and leaving its painful mark on her crown. Her shoes hit the brakes
violently
and the
car
lunged forward. Honks of protest erupted from behind her,
but
Lia
ignored
them. Her head fell on the smooth leather head support. A droplet of salty liquid cascaded
down
her pale face.
Soon
, the
car
slowly
entered the
parking
lot
of the mall. She stumbled outside and walked straight towards SAQ. She slammed a carton of a dozen of Bud Light Limes on the counter of the checkout. The action causing the bottle caps to rattle as the liquid trembled inside the glass bottle. Stares came from all directions of the
store
,
but
they all seemed to bounce
off
an invisible barrier as
Lia
did not spare them a single glance. The cashier
took
notice of her dark
eye
bags and swollen red
eyes
and
quickly
averted her gaze.
Lia
grabbed the handle of the carton and
quickly
headed towards her
car
. Once she arrived, she immediately uncapped the bottle and
took
a swig of the
cold
golden liquid. Her
eyes
trailed on the silver ring on her ring finger that sparkled in the sunlight. She slid it
off
, and
gently
placed it on the ground of the
parking
lot
. The ring continued to glitter in the sunlight, as
Lia
drove away.

She
just
learned that she has
only
six months to
live
.

Georgie’s distraught
eyes
stared
blankly
at the road. Her shaky
hands
clutched the
wheel
of the second-hand Toyota Prius, the sweat
slightly
soaking through the fabric. Her
car
pulled into the
parking
lot
, and she
slowly
got
out. Georgie walked to the candy
section
before
grabbing a Kit Kat. She walked out after paying, and stepped into the sunlight. Georgie raised her head to gaze at the source of light above her. She narrowed her
eyes
as the sun shone upon her. Georgie kicked at a pebble and
watched
it roll to the exit of the
parking
lot
. Seconds later, a
car
zoomed by and crushed the pebble beneath its tires. Georgie’s
eyes
became misty, and she
quickly
ran
back
to her
car
. She slammed the
door
shut as she ignited the
car
engine. Silent tears streamed
down
her face as the
car
stopped
at a red light.

She
has to
make
an
important
speech to a large group of business associates that evening.

A pair of intent
eyes
bore holes in the window of the
car
, as the Tesla Model S drifted into the shabby
parking
lot
. Brooke
got
out, shutting the
door
of the classy white
car
before
heading into the
little
tailor
store
. Inside she
was escorted
to find a suit in the dimmed room that smelled like fabric. As she was
being measured
for her sizes, she closed her
eyes
and mumbled the same words under her breath. When she
took
her suit and
left
the
store
, her
eyes
suddenly
lit up. Arriving in the
car
, she immediately kicked
off
her black heels
before
opening her laptop on her dashboard. She
furiously
started
typing on a
powerpoint
, her fingers flying over the keyboard. Her stance
relaxed and
she stepped on the gas pedal
before
reversing out of the
parking
lot
. The dark brown liquid of
now
cold
coffee swayed
dangerously
in the plastic cup. Brooke’s phone rang, her manager’s name appearing on the screen. Brooke listened
intently
before
replying, “I’m on my way. ” She then
took
the entrance to the highway, looking determined.

She
just
dropped
off
her best friend, who is moving across the country, at the airport.

Her teeth chewed her chapped lips as Aria
watched
the figure that had long disappeared from the airport
doors
. Her head turned as a whistling sound urged her to
move
her
car
. She
quickly
ran
back
to her Land Rover Discovery and shut the
doors
of her black
car
before
stepping on the acceleration pedal. Her
car
leaving the long line of
cars
and pulling onto a highway. Aria tried to
stop
the tears that stung in her
eyes
. A message
suddenly
flashed through her phone screen, Aria’s shoulders shook as she tried to
stop
the steady flow of salty liquid cascaded
down
her cheeks.
But
she
still
stared at the road in front of her,
hands
still
grasping the steering
wheel
tightly
as she headed towards the supermarket. She pulled over at Target and headed towards the kitchen garbage bags aisle. Aria’s
still
glossy
eyes
scanned the products
before
grabbing a box of 24 garbage bags. After paying for her
purchase
, she exited the
store
and climbed in her
car
. Puffy
eyes
gazing out the window as she reversed out of the driveway.

She is trying to decide between adopting a puppy or a kitten from the local rescue.

Irene chewed on the nail of her
left
hand
as her right gripped the steering
wheel
of her BMW X6. Her teeth leaving uneven bite marks on her nails as she gnawed on them. Her
car
slowly
pulled into the
parking
lot
, as a few honks announced their annoyance at her
tremendously
slow pace. Irene opened the window
before
waving her
hand
in apology to the
cars
behind her. She opened the
door
of her
car
and ran into the pet
store
. She paced around the
store
before
stopping at the
treats
section
. Her
eyes
moved
nervously
from the cats’ snack
section
to the dogs’
section
. Her
hand
levitated in the air as she continued to gaze at the two types of
treats
.
Soon
enough
Irene slammed a packet of
treats
on the counter and handed the cashier her credit card. She
got
back
in her
car
, throwing the pack of
treats
in the
back
seat along with a cage and blankets
before
pulling out of the
parking
lot
. She drove
off
, with a half guilty look, half excited look on her face.
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IELTS essay showing how a woman drives to a store and back in 5 different scenarios with concrete details

Essay
  American English
11 paragraphs
1081 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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