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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth and resources among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves? v.3

Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth and resources among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves? v. 3
Although there is a wide disparity in the resources available to the people living in different countries, still, I would argue that the government should be accountable for fulfilling its citizens day to day needs. It is imperative that the government in each country is held responsible for providing its citizen basic needs. Firstly, if help is always at hand, some governments may not put in all their efforts to meet both hands, while, few others are going an extra mile to cater for their own as well as the other nations demand. Poor nations can borrow money from world bank to set up, for instance, short scale industries to create employment for its people and boost the economy in long run. Various other steps can always be taken by venturing in trade and commerce for well- being of the nation. Secondly, it may seem unfair to the citizens of the nation providing support that the taxes paid by them for the development of their own nation are being used towards others. Furthermore, it is also a herculean task to categorise all the nations into rich and poor, and then to select a criterion to decide the priority among nations seeking help. Despite all that, we all should be ready to offer help to a nation in times of crisis that arise due to unforeseen circumstances, for instance, floods, earthquake, hurricanes. In conclusion, the common needs of a man should be looked after by the ruling government he chose for himself while in times of calamities, we all should stand united for each other.
Although there is a wide disparity in the resources available to the
people
living in
different
countries,
still
, I would argue that the
government
should be accountable for fulfilling its citizens day to day needs.

It is imperative that the
government
in each country
is held
responsible for providing its citizen basic needs.
Firstly
, if
help
is always at hand,
some
governments
may not put in all their efforts to
meet
both hands, while, few others are going an extra mile to cater for their
own
as well as
the
other
nations
demand. Poor
nations
can borrow money from
world bank
to set up,
for instance
, short scale industries to create employment for its
people
and boost the economy in long run. Various
other
steps can always
be taken
by venturing in trade and commerce for well- being of the nation.

Secondly
, it may seem unfair to the citizens of the
nation
providing support that the taxes paid by them for the development of their
own
nation
are being
used
towards others.
Furthermore
, it is
also
a
herculean
task to
categorise
all the
nations
into rich and poor, and then to select a criterion to decide the priority among
nations
seeking
help
. Despite all that, we all should be ready to offer
help
to a
nation
in times of crisis that arise due to unforeseen circumstances,
for instance
, floods, earthquake, hurricanes.

In conclusion
, the common needs of a
man
should
be looked
after by the ruling
government
he chose for himself while in times of calamities, we all should stand united for each
other
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth and resources among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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