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Should the speed limit on Mongolia's highway lowered or increased

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Debate about whether increasing or decreasing speed limit in Mongolia’s highway is a troubling topic. Numerous amounts of people argue that it should be increased, due to fast travelling time. On the contrary, countless other people believe that speed limit should be decreased, thus lowering the number of car crashes and fatalities. This essay will discuss about whether should we lower or increase the speed limit. Number of people consider that it is convenient that they can commute swiftly, due to the fact that speed limit in Mongolia is rather high compared to other countries. High way speed limit in Mongolia is 120 kilometers per hour, whereas most other countries have limit of 90 kilometers per hour. Therefore, going by what is considered usual speed in Mongolia, is technically over speeding by 30 kilometers per hour. This enormous distinction in speed can lead to adverse effects, as such as injuries, property damage and possibly death. Study conducted by local scientists shows that at least 5387 crashes and 4105 fatalities are caused by high speed car crashes on highways just in 2020. Also 3023 of 4125 deaths, accounts for children. This causes distress in their communities, due to the fact that fatality rate so high while commuting on highways, parents are frightened as they constantly worrying about cars that might be going as the speed limit, that is considered regular. This therefore shows that they should make a change about the speed limit, that they are terrified with. In conclusion, highway speed limit in Mongolia way too abnormal, considering how much inconvenience it has caused just by 2020. It is obvious that if left unattended it will lead to more and more deaths in the future. That is why, as it might set off some people, it’s better to lower the speed limit no matter what.
Debate about whether increasing or decreasing
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speed
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limit
in Mongolia’s
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highway
is a troubling topic. Numerous amounts of
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people
argue that it should
be increased
, due to
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fast
travelling time.
On the contrary
, countless other
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people
believe that
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speed
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limit
should
be decreased
,
thus
lowering the number of car crashes and fatalities. This essay will
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discuss about whether
should we lower or increase the
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speed
limit.

Number of
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people
consider that it is convenient that they can commute
swiftly
, due to the fact that
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speed
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limit
in Mongolia is
rather
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high
compared to other countries.
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High
way
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speed
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limit
in Mongolia is 120 kilometers per hour, whereas most other countries have
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limit
of 90 kilometers per hour.
Therefore
, going by what
is considered
usual
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speed
in Mongolia, is
technically
over speeding by 30 kilometers per hour. This enormous distinction in
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speed
can lead to adverse effects, as such as injuries, property damage and
possibly
death. Study conducted by local scientists
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shows
that at least 5387 crashes and 4105 fatalities
are caused
by
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high
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speed
car crashes on
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highways
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just
in 2020.
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Also
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so
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high
while commuting on
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highways
, parents
are frightened
as they
constantly
worrying about cars that might be going as the
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speed
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limit
, that
is considered
regular. This
therefore
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shows
that they should
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make
a
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change
about the
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speed
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limit
, that they
are terrified
with.

In conclusion
,
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highway
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speed
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limit
in Mongolia way too abnormal, considering how much inconvenience it has caused
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just
by 2020. It is obvious that if
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left
unattended it will lead to more and more deaths in the future.
That is
why, as it might set off
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some
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people
, it’s better to lower the
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speed
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limit
no matter what.
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IELTS essay Should the speed limit on Mongolia's highway lowered or increased

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
305 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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