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My reflection of hospital

My reflection of hospital BwPbw
Before the orientation week while I was preparing for my first day at the Mental Health Hospital. I was confused and not fully ready to begin the psychiatric's rotations. On the first day, October 24, we went to the mental health department in The Al-Mahjar hospital. The gathering was at 10 o’clock in the meeting room. Everything was going well until I arrived and stopped at the gate of the hospital. I was shocked that the place was very old and uncared for. Dr. Nova was our instructor that day. She waiting for the us in the meeting room and She started introducing us to the hospital and the most common case and What are the things that should be do and that should be avoided while dealing with a psycatric patient. I learned a lot. Then, I got excited when it was time to explore the hospital and see the patients. It was new and unusual experience for me. We saw some of the chronic cases. For a moment I thought I was in a prison because that's what I think they feel like. Second orientation day was in Al-Amal hospital. This place was more comfortable and neat. I arrived to the hospital and everyone was friendly and guiding me to the meeting room. We were with Dr. Lujain that day. In the meeting room, the nurse gave us refreshing information about the hospital, addiction substances and their symptoms, medications and so on. It really opened my eyes about a lot of things that l consider when I get to interview the patients. Lastly, we took a quick tour of the hospital's sections to know where to go on our next rotation. The Third day was the orientation for the virtual simulation. They discussed and explained everything and How will it work. I was familiar with the idea of the simulation so I wasn't scared nor nervous. It is great to have this opportunity to learn from our mistakes and it's a chance to improve my skills. I feel like l'll be much more comfortable in simulation rather than in the hospital. The simulation is a brilliant idea and such a safe experience during the pandemic. After that we visited Erfan hospital with Dr. Alaa it was so comfortable and nice. Finally, The whole experience went smoothly, I gained a very good knowledge that I can now say that I'm prepared for the upcoming clinical rotations. I'll start reading more and reviewing the information before the next clinical day. I'll also practice on my communication skills since it's the most important skill in this course.
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first
day at the Mental Health
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Hospital
. I
was confused
and not
fully
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begin
the psychiatric's rotations. On the
first
day, October 24, we went to the mental health department in The
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Al-Mahjar
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hospital
. The gathering was at 10 o’clock in the
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meeting
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room
. Everything was going well until I arrived and
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stopped
at the gate of the
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hospital
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was shocked
that the place was
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very
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old
and
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for. Dr. Nova was our instructor that day.
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for
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the us
in the
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room and
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started
introducing us to the
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hospital
and the most common case and What are the things that should be
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and that should
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while dealing with a
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patient. I learned a lot. Then, I
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got
excited when it was time to explore the
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hospital
and
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see
the patients. It was new and unusual experience for me. We
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saw
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some of the
chronic cases. For a moment I
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thought
I was in a prison
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because
that's what I
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think
they feel like.

Second orientation day was in
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Al-Amal
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hospital
. This place was more comfortable and neat. I arrived to the
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hospital
and everyone was friendly and guiding me to the
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meeting
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room
. We were with Dr.
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Lujain
that day.

In the
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room
, the nurse gave us refreshing information about the
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hospital
, addiction substances and their symptoms, medications and
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so
on. It
really
opened my eyes about
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a lot of
things that l consider when I
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get
to interview the patients.
Lastly
, we took a quick tour of the hospital's sections to know where to go on our
next
rotation.

The Third day was the orientation for the virtual
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simulation
. They discussed and
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explained
everything and How will it work. I was familiar with the
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idea
of the
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simulation
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so
I wasn't scared nor nervous. It is great to have this opportunity to learn from our mistakes and it's a chance to
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improve
my
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skills
. I feel like l'll be much more comfortable in
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simulation
rather
than in the
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hospital
. The
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is a brilliant
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idea
and such a safe experience during the pandemic. After that we visited
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Erfan
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with Dr.
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Alaa
it was
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so
comfortable and nice.

Finally
, The whole experience went
smoothly
, I gained a
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very
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good
knowledge that I can
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now
say that I'm prepared for the upcoming clinical rotations. I'll
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start
reading more and reviewing the information
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before
the
next
clinical day. I'll
also
practice on my communication
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since it's the most
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skill
in this course.
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IELTS essay My reflection of hospital

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
436 words
5.5
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