Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Should the space of public parks be used for other purposes such as building residential areas for the growing population or developing business and the economy?

Should the space of public parks be used for other purposes such as building residential areas for the growing population or developing business and the economy? PW7Pw
In my opinion, public parks should not be used to build residential areas and economic development zones. Firstly, where the common activities of people will disappear. Increasing population makes people need more housing, they even turn public places like parks into high-rise buildings. This reduces the natural environment and makes the loss of a place where the general operation of everyone. Secondly, human life becomes suffocating. The world is becoming modernized modernizing and it is highly demanding economically, so enterprises or companies appear a lot. As a result, there is not enough land to build them and people take away the park, people's lives are restricted when there is no community space.
In my opinion, public parks should not be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to build residential areas and economic development zones.
Firstly
, where the common activities of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will disappear. Increasing population
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
need more housing, they even turn public places like parks into high-rise buildings. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the natural environment and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the loss of a place where the general operation of everyone.
Secondly
, human life becomes suffocating. The world is becoming modernized modernizing and it is
highly
demanding
economically
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
enterprises or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
appear a lot.
As a result
, there is not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
land to build them and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
take away the park,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
are restricted
when there is no community space.

IELTS essay Should the space of public parks be used for other purposes such as building residential areas for the growing population or developing business and the economy?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
112 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Should the space of public parks be used for other purposes such as building residential areas for the growing population or developing business and the economy?