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Should retirement age be fixed for everyone

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Retirement age has been a hot topic in recent years. A number of people believe that retirement age should depend on occupation and should not be the same for everyone. This essay will discuss both sides in detail and put forth the argument that the type of work should determine the age of retirement. Having a common age offers some advantages. It simplifies the pension policy planning for governments because they only need to look at one criteria for pension policy, and that is the number of people who will turn 65. If this age varied by occupation, the government's job would be a bit more complicated. Further, setting a single criteria, which is applicable to everyone, seems fair. However, is it really a fair system? The concept of retirement age is based on the principle that human skills diminish with age and people are no longer employable beyond a certain point. It certainly does not imply that people will become unemployable at the same time even though they work in different fields. Take the case of a 61 year old truck driver who committed suicide because he could no longer drive 50 hours in a week, the minimum hours that were required to earn his salary. Moreover, a recent survey of workers in this profession highlighted a sharp increase in accidents for workers over the age of 60. There has to be a job based approach to retirement. If one is employed in either of two kinds of jobs, they should be allowed to end their professional career early: jobs where skills diminish with age and jobs with high stress levels. Under the first category, there are truck drivers, oil field drillers while healthcare workers, psychologists, criminal investigators belong to the second group. I believe that the kind of work one does determines the longevity of a career. One size fits all approach can not be applied. However, this age should be common across all identified occupations in order to keep things relatively simple for framing pension polcies, and yet allow people to end their work life with dignity.
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believe that
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retirement
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age
should depend on occupation and should not be the same for

everyone. This essay will discuss both sides in detail and put forth the argument that the type of
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work
should determine the
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age
of retirement.

Having a common
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offers
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governments
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need to look at
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policy, and
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people
who will turn 65. If this
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age
varied by occupation, the
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's
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would be a bit more complicated.
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, which is applicable to everyone, seems
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system?

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retirement
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skills
diminish with
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and
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are no longer employable beyond a certain point.

It
certainly
does not imply that
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will become unemployable at the same time
even though
they
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work
in
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different
fields. Take the case of a 61 year
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old
truck driver

who committed suicide
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because
he could no longer drive 50 hours in a week, the minimum hours that
were required
to earn his salary.
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age
of 60.

There
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be a
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based approach to
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. If one
is employed
in either of two kinds of
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jobs
, they should be
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allowed
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end
their professional career early:
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jobs
where
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skills
diminish with
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age
and
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jobs
with high
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stress
levels. Under the
first
category, there are truck drivers, oil field drillers while healthcare workers, psychologists, criminal investigators belong to the second group.

I believe that the kind of
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work
one does determines the longevity of a career. One size fits all approach can not
be applied
.
However
, this
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age
should be common across all identified occupations in order to
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keep
things
relatively
simple for framing pension
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end
their
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life

with dignity.
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IELTS essay Should retirement age be fixed for everyone

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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