Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Should Olympic athletes be tested for drugs?

Should Olympic athletes be tested for drugs? gRPl
The idea of being a winner in a prominent sporting event may motivate athletes to turn to performance-enhancing drugs. In this regard, some people are firmly convinced that athletes should be tested for drugs, while others consider it ineffective. I believe that drug testing programs can help to organize fair sporting events as well as avoid hazardous consequences to the health of participants. The struggle with doping and detecting it has become a large-scale problem in conducting fair sporting games. The reason for testing athletes for drugs is to create conditions for fair and healthy competition, so detection of illegal chemicals can help to encourage participants to come to winning with their perseverance and hard work. Besides, fame and material reward should be received by the one who improved his skills with work and dedication, which will correspond to both the moral principles and the original goal of the Olympic Games. Furthermore, another reason behind this is to protect sportsmen from harm to their health from these illicit substances, also, officials decided to implement a drug testing program because there have been some fatalities for athletes who received a chemical supplement to enhance their skills. Additionally, over the past fifty years there has been a steady increase in accuracy of testing programs for PED (performance-enhancing drugs). Scientists have still kept working on its amelioration which may lead to the discovery of new useful innovations in the medical sphere or find out more effective treatments for serious illnesses such as cancer, HIV infection and others. Moreover, there is the possibility of creating alternative organic supplements for athletes that may help to improve their skills without harm to a health. To sum up, the initial aim of the Olympic games was to find the man with the most powerful spirit and body who had to win without cheating in the honest game. In modern sporting events, society and officials must follow this concept, therefore drug testing of athletes is fair enough and in many aspects is effective and beneficial not only for the testers, but also for the athletes.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of being a winner in a prominent sporting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
may motivate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
athletes
to turn to performance-enhancing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
. In this regard,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are
firmly
convinced that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
athletes
should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tested
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
, while others consider it ineffective. I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drug
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
testing
programs can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to organize
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fair
sporting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
as well
as avoid hazardous
The usual preposition to use after "consequences" is not "to". Did you mean "consequences of", "consequences for", or "consequences on"?
consequences to
the health of participants.

The struggle with doping and detecting it has become a large-scale problem in conducting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fair
sporting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
. The reason for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
testing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
athletes
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
is to create conditions for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fair
and healthy competition,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
detection of illegal chemicals can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to encourage participants to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to winning with their perseverance and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work.
Besides
, fame and material reward should
be received
by the one who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
with work and dedication, which will correspond to both the moral principles and the original goal of the Olympic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Games
.
Furthermore
, another reason behind this is to protect sportsmen from harm to their health from these illicit substances,
also
, officials decided to implement a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drug
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
testing
program
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there have been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
fatalities for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
athletes
who received a chemical supplement to enhance their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

Additionally
, over the past fifty years there has been a steady increase in accuracy of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
testing
programs for PED (performance-enhancing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs)
. Scientists have
still
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
working on its amelioration which may lead to the discovery of new useful innovations in the medical sphere or find out more effective treatments for serious illnesses such as cancer, HIV infection
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
.
Moreover
, there is the possibility of creating alternative organic supplements for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
athletes
that may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
without harm to a health.

To sum up, the initial aim of the Olympic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
was to find the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
with the most powerful spirit and body who had to win without cheating in the honest game. In modern sporting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
, society and officials
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
follow this concept,
therefore
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drug
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
testing
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
athletes
is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fair
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
and in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
aspects is effective and beneficial not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
for the testers,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
athletes
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Should Olympic athletes be tested for drugs?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts