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Should governments make decisions about people’s lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

People have the right to follow what lifestyle they believe as long as it does not affect anyone else. However, it is stated that their lifestyle should be controlled by the authority. I partly agree with that idea. This essay will demonstrate both views which are why the government should intervene in people’s lifestyle and the opposition. To begin with, some people have lots of bad habits that could influence the public adversely. For example, smoking has a negative impact on smokers as well as people around. If there is no law to regulate that activity in the public, numerous innocents may have lung problems just because they incidentally inhale smoke which comes from others. Furthermore, other addictive drugs such as heroin, cocaine, and so on, which can threaten life quality. Specifically, the increasing number of addicts can reduce the working productivity of a country. Therefore, it is necessary to eliminate any society’s vices by governments. On the other hand, The deep intervention of governments can lead to the loss of freedom. In some democratic countries, the citizens do not have free speeches. They can not speak up against government’s violation even though they witness it with their own eyes. In such countries, the government can send them to jail for opposition. That leads to creativity and productivity of workers lower than counterparts from other countries where their citizens can decide what lifestyle they want. For instance, in North Korea, the residents are not permitted to leave their nation, any actions considered against the government can make them end up in jail. Thus, it is a poor country and it usually needs donations from other countries. In conclusion, it will be a win-win solution if governments play a role in managing people’s lifestyle. They can use their power to prohibit inferior lifestyle and encourage superior habits.
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have the right to follow what
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lifestyle
they believe as long as it does not affect anyone else.
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should
be controlled
by the authority. I partly
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agree
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idea
. This essay will demonstrate both views which are why the
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government
should intervene in
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people’s
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lifestyle
and the opposition.

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people
have lots of
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bad
habits that could influence the public
adversely
.
For example
, smoking has a
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negative
impact on smokers
as well
as
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people
around. If there is no law to regulate that activity in the public, numerous innocents may have lung problems
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they
incidentally
inhale smoke which
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from others.
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,
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other
addictive drugs such as heroin, cocaine, and
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on, which can threaten life quality.
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, the increasing number of addicts can
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reduce
the working productivity of a
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country
.
Therefore
, it is necessary to eliminate any society’s vices by
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governments
.

On the
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hand, The deep intervention of
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governments
can lead to the loss of freedom. In
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some
democratic
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countries
, the citizens do not have free speeches. They can not speak up against
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government’s
violation
even though
they witness it with their
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own
eyes. In such
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countries
, the
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can
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send
them to jail for opposition. That leads to creativity and productivity of workers lower than counterparts from
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other
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countries
where their citizens can decide what
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lifestyle
they want.
For instance
, in North Korea, the residents are not permitted to
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leave
their nation, any actions considered against the
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government
can
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make
them
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end
up in jail.
Thus
, it is a poor
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country and
it
usually
needs donations from
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other
countries.

In conclusion
, it will be a win-win solution if
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governments
play a role in managing
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people’s
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lifestyle
. They can
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use
their power to prohibit inferior
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lifestyle
and encourage superior habits.
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IELTS essay Should governments make decisions about people’s lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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