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should countries invest in building transport systems? consider both views and express an opinion v.2

should countries invest in building transport systems? consider both views and express an opinion v. 2
The infrastructure development is vital for a nation. Good infrastructure facilities can reduce the traffic congestion and also increase the trading of goods. However, in my view, the government should invest more money on primary economic issues such as, housing and employment opportunities, rather than spending funds on better transportation systems. In my essay I will share both the views. We cannot deny the various merits gained by improving the infrastructure facility in the country. With a good public transportation system, we can reduce the traffic congestion in the city. If there are better public transport facilities provided to the citizens, this could encourage them to use public transportation. Secondly, with good infrastructural facilities there could be an increase in trading. With a well connected transport system, the amount of reach across other nations would increase. This will provide easy accessibility and increase in trading. This would overall lead to economic growth of the country. However, there are also various disadvantages. There are limited funds that the developing countries have. These funds should be first used to solve the primary economic issues. One of the major problems of these countries is lack of employment. As most of these economies are still developing, there are lesser job opportunities. As there are not enough jobs in the market, many people are unemployed. Furthermore, due to unemployment most of, the individuals are below the poverty line and have no place to live, and the sanitation conditions are bad. The limited funds of the government should be first used to solve basic economic problems. To conclude, though it is important for a country to develop its infrastructural facilities. The government needs to first prioritise its fund and give more importance on spending money to solve the basic economic problems such as unemployment and housing before they invest funds on infrastructure facilities.
The
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infrastructure
development is vital for a nation.
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Good
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infrastructure
facilities can
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reduce
the traffic congestion and
also
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increase
the trading of
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goods
.
However
, in my view, the
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government
should invest more money on primary
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economic
issues such as, housing and employment opportunities,
rather
than spending funds on better transportation systems. In my essay I will share both the views.

We cannot deny the various merits gained by improving the
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infrastructure
facility in the
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country
. With a
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good
public transportation system, we can
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reduce
the traffic congestion in the city. If there are better public transport facilities provided to the citizens, this could encourage them to
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use
public transportation.
Secondly
, with
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good
infrastructural facilities there could be an
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increase
in trading. With a
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well connected
transport system, the amount of reach across other nations would
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increase
. This will provide easy accessibility and
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increase
in trading. This would
overall
lead to
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economic
growth of the country.

However
, there are
also
various disadvantages. There
are limited
funds that the developing
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countries
have. These funds should be
first
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used
to solve the primary
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economic
issues. One of the major problems of these
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countries
is lack of employment. As most of these economies are
still
developing, there are lesser job opportunities. As there are not
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enough
jobs in the market,
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many
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people
are unemployed
.
Furthermore
, due to unemployment most of, the individuals are below the poverty line and have no place to
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live
, and the sanitation conditions are
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bad
. The limited funds of the
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government
should be
first
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used
to solve basic
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economic
problems.

To conclude
, though it is
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important
for a
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country
to develop its infrastructural facilities. The
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government
needs to
first
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prioritise
its
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fund
and give more importance on spending money to solve the basic
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economic
problems such as unemployment and housing
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before
they invest funds on
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infrastructure
facilities.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay should countries invest in building transport systems? consider both views and express an opinion v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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