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Serious violent crimes among people who are under-18 are becoming more common. Some people think that children who commit serious crimes should be treated like adults, while others would say that they should be rehabilitated. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Serious violent crimes among people who are under-18 are becoming more common. Some people think that children who commit serious crimes should be treated like adults, while others would say that they should be rehabilitated. x6R1
Some would argue that teenagers should face the same charges as adult criminals, while others believer that they should be placed in a rehabilitation center. Although it may seem fair to put a young criminal in jail, it does not help our society in the long term. From the victims’ point of view they deserve a justice which usually means to put the murder into jail. However, a crime committed by young people is a different case. Young criminals are not fully developed mentally and physically, so often they are not aware of the consequence of the result. Placing them in jail will not prevent or stop further crime from happening. In fact, many young criminals keep committing crime when they become adults, and it is because they are never given a chance to learn to be a normal adult. Therefore, I believe this is not the best approach to the minor criminals. On the other hand, many young criminal suffer from various neglect or child abuse in their early lives, so rehabilitation center can provide them with the treatment that they need. Committing a crime is a way to release their anger although it is illegal but it is the fastest and easiest thing for them to do. Jail time will not help them to learn how to release their anger and learn how to adapt to society, but rehabilitation centers can help these young children. Therefore, I strongly believe giving young criminals a second chance to learn and to do the right thing is the best way to handle the minor criminals. In conclusion, young criminal and adult criminal both committed something bad; However, a minor is not fully mature, and they should not be treated as an adult because it will not stop them from doing it in the future.
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, while others believer that they should
be placed
in a rehabilitation center. Although it may seem
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fair
to put a
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in
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, it does not
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our society in the long term.

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usually
means to put the murder into
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jail
.
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crime
committed by
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young
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people
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is
a
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case.
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Young
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criminals
are not
fully
developed mentally and
physically
,
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they are not aware of the consequence of the result. Placing them in
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jail
will not
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further
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crime
when they become
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, and it is
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they are never
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given
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learn
to be a normal adult.
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, I believe this is not the best approach to the minor criminals.

On the other hand
,
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many
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young
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criminal
suffer from various neglect or child abuse in their early
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lives
,
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so
rehabilitation center can provide them with the treatment that they need. Committing a
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crime
is a way to release their anger although it is illegal
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but
it is the fastest and easiest thing for them to do.
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Jail
time will not
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help
them to
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learn
how to release their anger and
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how to adapt to society,
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but
rehabilitation centers can
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help
these
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young
children.
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, I
strongly
believe giving
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young
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criminals
a second chance to
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learn
and to do the right thing is the best way to handle the minor criminals.

In conclusion
,
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young
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and adult
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both committed something
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bad
;
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, a minor is not
fully
mature, and they should not
be treated
as an adult
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because
it will not
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stop
them from doing it in the future.
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IELTS essay Serious violent crimes among people who are under-18 are becoming more common. Some people think that children who commit serious crimes should be treated like adults, while others would say that they should be rehabilitated.

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