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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. LOY1
In modern society, which is empowered with technological innovations, many people Argus that scientists and technologists celebrate more respect than artists and musicians. In this case, I, however disagree with the statement and believe that musicians and artists recieve more honor than the innovaters, reason behind this are been followed. To start with, scientists and technologists are the assets of society because they offer workable solutions for everyday life. They expand the boundaries of knowledge, which in turn, brings appreciable benefits to the society. But, I personally haven't seen them in media and has been followed by mass people, have you noticed? Ordinary people never realize how scientists and technologists shape the society. On the contrary, musicians and artist are respectable and more followed in the society as they convey life, which enables people to relate and derives exceptional pleasure from music. Apart from this, musicians also trigger social revolution to transform the world. For an instance, consider the even tomorrow land, which mainly focus on unity and equality is conveyed by amazing artist from all around the earth. Likewise, society also follows and values the ability of artists so can influence major population. To conclude with, while scientists are valued with their contributions to society, musicians are more honored because of the emotional attachment with people and commicate with mass people easily.
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scientists
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musicians
.
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, I,
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musicians
and
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recieve
more honor than the
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innovaters
, reason behind this
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scientists
and technologists are the assets of
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society
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because
they offer
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workable
solutions for everyday life. They expand the boundaries of knowledge, which in turn, brings appreciable benefits to the
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society
.
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personally
haven't
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seen
them in media and has
been followed
by mass
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people
, have you noticed? Ordinary
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people
never realize how
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scientists
and technologists shape the society.

On the contrary
,
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musicians
and
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artist
are respectable and more followed in the
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society
as they convey life, which enables
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people
to relate and derives exceptional pleasure from music. Apart from this,
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musicians
also
trigger social revolution to transform the world. For an instance, consider the even tomorrow land, which
mainly
focus on unity and equality
is conveyed
by amazing
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artist
from all around the earth.
Likewise
,
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society
also
follows and values the ability of
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artists
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so
can influence major population.

To conclude
with, while
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scientists
are valued
with their contributions to
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society
,
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musicians
are more honored
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because
of the emotional attachment with
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people
and
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commicate
with mass
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people
easily
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IELTS essay Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists.

Essay
  American English
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223 words
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