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There are many things that can motivate people to perform well in their work. These can include the salary, job satisfaction or the chance to help others. What do you feel is the best motivation to do well at work?

There are many things that can motivate people to perform well in their work. These can include the salary, job satisfaction or the chance to help others. What do you feel is the best motivation to do well at work? POGB
It is believed that only motivated people can contribute to a higher productivity level at work. There are multiple methods for employers to stimulate their employees. In my opinion, the most effective way to maintain motivation is financial compensation. However, job satisfaction and the opportunity to help others are also good strategies to improve performance at work. For the majority of people, a high salary is the main motivational tool, which leads to more output. This is due to the fact that money is necessary to fulfill most basic things and materialistic desires. As a result, being rewarded monetarily employees have golden opportunities not only to provide for their family financially but also satisfy their adding needs such as the possibility to travel and recreate. To illustrate, having carried out research, scientists from MSU have established that salary is a key motivational factor for 85% of workforce participants. On the other hand, income far from the only intensive. Another factor that can also influence performance is job satisfaction. In other words, when a person is comfortable in their work, they are more likely enthusiastic, driven, and accomplish tasks quickly, take action, and want to do a good job, both for themselves and for the company. Therefore, these options are directly connected with wage because good performance leads to promotion, which provides better benefits packages. For some people, only their passion able to drive them. A good example of this are voluntary jobs, where salary is low or is absent at all. On the contrary those who choose to work in this sphere are frequently driven by their passion to help others and this weighs more than their income. In conclusion, while material gains are the most obvious motivational aspect but it is not the sole incentive for working hard and a number of people are stimulated due to other reasons.
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can contribute to a higher productivity level at work. There are multiple methods for employers to stimulate their employees. In my opinion, the most effective way to maintain motivation is financial compensation.
However
,
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job
satisfaction and the opportunity to
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help
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performance at work.

For the majority of
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, a high salary is the main motivational tool, which leads to more output.
This is due to the fact that
money is necessary to fulfill most basic things and materialistic desires.
As a result
,
being rewarded
monetarily
employees have golden opportunities not
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only
to provide for their family
financially
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also
satisfy their adding needs such as the possibility to travel and recreate. To illustrate, having carried out research, scientists from MSU have established that salary is a key motivational factor for 85% of workforce participants.

On the
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other
hand, income far from the
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only
intensive. Another factor that can
also
influence performance is
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job
satisfaction. In
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other
words, when a person is comfortable in their work, they are more likely enthusiastic, driven, and accomplish tasks
quickly
, take action, and want to do a
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good
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job
, both for themselves and for the
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company
.
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, these options are
directly
connected with wage
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because
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good
performance leads to promotion, which provides better benefits packages. For
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some
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people
,
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only
their passion able to drive them. A
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good
example of this are voluntary
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jobs
, where salary is low or is absent at all.
On the contrary
those who choose to work in this sphere are
frequently
driven by their passion to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
others and this weighs more than their income.

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, while material gains are the most obvious motivational aspect
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but
it is not the sole incentive for working
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hard
and a number of
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people
are stimulated
due to
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other
reasons.
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IELTS essay There are many things that can motivate people to perform well in their work. These can include the salary, job satisfaction or the chance to help others. What do you feel is the best motivation to do well at work?

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4 paragraphs
310 words
6.0
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