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Nowadays, almost all schools involve sport classes for all the graders.

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Nowadays, almost all schools involve sport classes for all the graders. This essay will provide the reasons why the school should include sport subject along with other significant subjects. Originally, everyone should move during the day to have a healthy body. Especially, these days, everyone spend their leisure time on smartphones and technology devices, whereas, students spend more time on their laptops to achieve and complete homework’s and watch some online classes. Therefore, this lower their movement and may lead to gain obesity. For instance, many students are overweight because of eating unhealthy food and are not doing physical exercises in other words they are not moving and are being unhealthy. Notwithstanding, schools should organize and divide the time on both academic courses and sport subject, as students should have fun and at the same time should work on mental health such as math, English, and science. In addition, physical exercises, plays a major role in benefiting the mental health, as the exercises help students’ brain to function well which will enable them to perform better in the other subjects. For example, many schools set the sport class as a first subject in the schedule, so that it will enable the students to have a better mental health. Overall, having a physical class at school is significant as the students need to move, play, and enjoy their time with their friends. It is a personal opinion that including physical education in the curriculum will increase their socializing ability with the other students. Also, this will enable them to have a better mental and physical health.
Nowadays, almost all
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involve
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classes
for all the graders. This essay will provide the reasons why the
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school
should include
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sport
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subject
along with
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significant subjects.

Originally
, everyone should
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move
during the day to have a healthy body.
Especially
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spend
their leisure
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time
on smartphones and technology devices, whereas,
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students
spend more
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time
on their laptops to achieve and complete homework’s and
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watch
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some
online
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classes
.
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many
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students
are overweight
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of eating unhealthy food and are not doing
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exercises in
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words they are not moving and are being unhealthy.

Notwithstanding,
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schools
should organize and divide the
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time
on both academic courses and
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sport
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subject
, as
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students
should have fun and at the same
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should work on
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mental
health such as math, English, and science.
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,
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exercises, plays a major role in benefiting the
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health, as the exercises
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help
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students’
brain to function well which will enable them to perform better in the
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other
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subjects
.
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set the
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as a
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in the schedule,
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that it will enable the
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students
to have a better
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mental
health.

Overall
, having a
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physical
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class
at
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school
is significant as the
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students
need to
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move
, play, and enjoy their
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with their friends. It is a personal opinion that including
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physical
education in the curriculum will increase their socializing ability with the
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other
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students
.
Also
, this will enable them to have a better
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mental
and
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physical
health.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, almost all schools involve sport classes for all the graders.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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