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Science is very important in the 21st century. How do you think it could be made more appealing to young people?

Science is very important in the 21st century. How do you think it could be made more appealing to young people? Nrlo2
In recent years, it has been observed an increase in the number of young people inspired to improve the world with science. More and more young scientists continue their development in the scientific community. It is observed an awareness among young people, that by virtue of their devoting of science, they could make the world better and the planet a better place to live. Scientific TV channels are the first touch with science for the future young researchers. When science is narrated in a fascinating way, this may inspire young scientists to follow the path of science in the future. Interactive museums could also be very interesting, especially when scientific experiments are demonstrated by students. This can stimulate the desire for discovery and different thinking among young people. In order science to be more appealing for young people, people in the scientific community should stimulate different, creative and unsettled way of finding a solutions, as well as to provide a space for expression of new ideas. Young researchers represent the future of science and often make unexpected discoveries, in many cases because of their different approach. I believe, that out-of-the-box thinking of young people could break down the stereotypes and undo misconceptions in all aspects of science. Due to these reasons, to give young researchers a space to create and apply their ideas is a good way to made science more appealing for young people.
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been observed
an increase in the number of
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young
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people
inspired to
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improve
the world with
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science
. More and more
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young
scientists continue their development in the scientific community. It
is observed
an awareness among
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young
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people
, that by virtue of their devoting of
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science
, they could
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make
the world better and the planet a better place to
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live
.

Scientific TV channels are the
first
touch with
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science
for the future
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young
researchers. When
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science
is narrated
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in a fascinating way
, this may inspire
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young
scientists to follow the path of
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science
in the future.

Interactive museums could
also
be
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very
interesting,
especially
when scientific experiments
are demonstrated
by students. This can stimulate the desire for discovery and
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different
thinking among
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young
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people
.

In order
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science
to be more appealing for
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young
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people
,
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people
in the scientific community should stimulate
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different
, creative and unsettled way of finding
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a solutions
,
as well
as to provide a space for expression of new
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ideas
.

Young researchers represent the future of
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science
and
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often
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make
unexpected discoveries, in
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many
cases
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because
of their
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different
approach. I believe, that out-of-the-box thinking of
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young
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people
could break down the stereotypes and undo misconceptions in all aspects of
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science
. Due to these reasons, to give
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young
researchers a space to create and apply their
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ideas
is a
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good
way to made
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science
more appealing for
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young
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IELTS essay Science is very important in the 21st century. How do you think it could be made more appealing to young people?

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