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Schools concentrate far too much on traditional subjects which do not adequately prepare students for the realistic demands of the modern working world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Schools concentrate far too much on traditional subjects which do not adequately prepare students for the realistic demands of the modern working world. PB2d
Nowadays, the educational system puts a lot of pressure on the theoretical part of the subjects rather than on the practical side of them, which could actually help students. Not only it could help them by knowing what to do in the future, but also how to face with modern problems. First of all, professors who teaches topics such as mathematics, chemistry, phisics and so on belive this are something very important, without a pupil cannot get through life. This is a reason why the amount of homework for this classes is usually enormous, making it difficult, almost impossible, to students to have free time. And, of course, they are important, but a big pille of after-school work does not provide good results if is not done properly. The only this that schools promote by this is memorizing over and over the same formulas and how to use them in hypothetical situations. There are a few educational institutions which have proper equipment to put in practice what students have learnt. Secondly, schools are trying to help individuals, but not in a very affective way. They put, at the disposal of every single student, consiliers whom are in charge to help people to find out what carrier should they choose after graduation. On paper every job seems perfect, with a lot of benefits, such as a big salary or a flexible workinf programm. Although, in reality there are also demands and tasks which should be accomplished. Hard work is payed, hence, teenagers are not ready for it, this is why the rate of unemployed people is increasing.
Nowadays, the educational system puts
a lot of
pressure on the theoretical part of the subjects
rather
than on the practical side of them, which could actually
help
students
. Not
only
it could
help
them by knowing what to do in the future,
but
also
how to face with modern problems.

First of all
, professors who teaches topics such as mathematics, chemistry,
phisics
and
so
on
belive
this are
something
very
important
, without a pupil cannot
get
through life. This is a reason why the amount of homework for
this
classes is
usually
enormous, making it difficult, almost impossible, to
students
to have free time. And,
of course
, they are
important
,
but
a
big
pille
of after-school work does not provide
good
results if is not done
properly
. The
only
this that schools promote by this is memorizing over and over the same formulas and how to
use
them in hypothetical situations. There are a few educational institutions which have proper equipment to put in practice what
students
have
learnt
.

Secondly
, schools are trying to
help
individuals,
but
not in a
very
affective way. They put, at the disposal of every single
student
,
consiliers
whom are in charge to
help
people
to find out what carrier should they choose after graduation. On paper every job seems perfect, with
a lot of
benefits, such as a
big
salary or a flexible
workinf
programm
. Although, in reality there are
also
demands and tasks which should
be accomplished
.
Hard
work is
payed
,
hence
,
teenagers
are not ready for it, this is why the rate of unemployed
people
is increasing.
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IELTS essay Schools concentrate far too much on traditional subjects which do not adequately prepare students for the realistic demands of the modern working world.

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