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Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.1

Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. v. 1
It is true that in order to be successful in today’s world, practical skills are equally important as theory. While some people believe that from primary education to higher education level, more time is spent on teaching theory rather than focusing on teaching practical knowledge. I strongly agree with the said statement. In this essay, we will cover two main reasons why is this so. Many of our schools and universities still follow the old way of teaching and there is no upgradation of the curriculum. Firstly, teachers are accustomed to traditional teaching methods. For instance, giving lectures and presentations to pupils without much interaction. Secondly, the curriculum is not updated to the current requirement of employment. There is imbalanced schedule, for example, we had only one practical class per week. If only education department strives to improve the curriculum and make a proper schedule, then only multiple skills can be instilled in students. Due to the low budget to education by the government, many institutes lack resources to carry out practical classes. For instance, in many government schools of Pakistan, there is no labs or labs are without all the required equipment. Even if laboratories are present, some schools lack trained professionals to handle the lab apparatus. Furthermore, some teachers are not fully trained to handle such a complicated apparatus. In conclusion, low funding and lack of upgradation in curriculum are the main reasons why some schools are lacking behind in imparting new skills to the current generation. In my opinion, government should review their education policy to help bring education to the requirements of today’s developing world.
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today
’s world,
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practical
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skills
are
equally
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important
as theory. While
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some
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people
believe that from primary
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education
to higher
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education
level, more time
is spent
on
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teaching
theory
rather
than focusing on
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teaching
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practical
knowledge. I
strongly
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agree
with the said statement. In this essay, we will cover two main reasons why is this
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so
.

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of our
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schools
and universities
still
follow the
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old
way of
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teaching
and there is no
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upgradation
of the
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curriculum
.
Firstly
, teachers
are accustomed
to traditional
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teaching
methods.
For instance
, giving lectures and presentations to pupils without much interaction.
Secondly
, the
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curriculum
is not updated to the
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current
requirement of employment. There
is imbalanced
schedule,
for example
, we had
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only
one
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practical
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class
per week. If
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only
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education
department strives to
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improve
the
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curriculum
and
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make
a proper schedule, then
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only
multiple
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skills
can
be instilled
in students.

Due to the low budget to
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education
by the
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government
,
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many
institutes lack resources to carry out
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practical
classes.
For instance
, in
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many
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government
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schools
of Pakistan,
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there is no labs
or labs are without all the required equipment. Even if laboratories are present,
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some
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schools
lack trained professionals to handle the lab apparatus.
Furthermore
,
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some
teachers are not
fully
trained to handle such a complicated apparatus.

In conclusion
, low funding and lack of
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upgradation
in
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curriculum
are the main reasons why
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some
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schools
are lacking behind in imparting new
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skills
to the
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current
generation. In my opinion,
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government
should review their
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education
policy to
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help
bring
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education
to the requirements of
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today
’s developing world.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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