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School uniforms should be abolished in all schools. Discuss to what extent you agree or disagree with this statement

School uniforms should be abolished in all schools. Discuss to what extent you agree or disagree with this statement JwGd0
People and students respectively are facing the dilemma of whether or not wearing school uniforms. Recently, this phenomenon has been brought to public attention with the people standing on two opposite sides. Although it can be stated that uniforms should be eradicated, I would argue that wearing uniforms in school has its own benefits On one side of the argument, there is an army of people who claim that pupils can wear everything they want. People speculate this might be due to the fact that school uniforms are expensive. Instead of buying uniforms, many people, especially who live in poverty, can utilize the amount of that money to buy other essential things or saving moneys. Nevertheless, children can be more individual. They feel more comfortable than wearing such a mundane uniform. However, I would be inclined to argue against that as I reckon that school uniforms can be deter out of school. This might be explained by the reasons that uniforms reduce the inequality and feeling of envy. Wearing freestyle clothes can cause a gap between students as they look at the other and assess their clothes. For instances, a poor students can be assessed by the rich students just since they don’t like what that student wearing. As a result, the poor student can be bullying and criticized. Secondly, students do not have to waste a colossal time to choose clothes which should be worn tomorrow. In conclusion, this essay inevitably support the idea that uniforms can not be abandoned in all schools. From my point of view, wearing uniform at school is the best options to discipline students.
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and
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respectively
are facing the dilemma of
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whether or not
wearing
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school
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uniforms
. Recently, this phenomenon has
been brought
to public attention with the
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people
standing on two opposite sides. Although it can
be stated
that
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uniforms
should
be eradicated
, I would argue that wearing
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uniforms
in
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school
has its
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own
benefits

On one side of the argument, there is an army of
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people
who claim that pupils can wear everything they want.
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People
speculate this might be due to the fact that
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school
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uniforms
are expensive.
Instead
of buying
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uniforms
,
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many
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people
,
especially
who
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live
in poverty, can utilize the amount of that money to
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buy
other essential things or saving moneys.
Nevertheless
, children can be more individual. They feel more comfortable than wearing such a mundane uniform.

However
, I would
be inclined
to argue against that as I reckon that
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school
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uniforms
can be
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out of
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. This might be
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explained
by the reasons that
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uniforms
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reduce
the inequality and feeling of envy. Wearing freestyle clothes can cause a gap between
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students
as they look at the other and assess their clothes. For instances, a poor
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students
can
be assessed
by the rich
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students
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just
since they don’t like what that
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student
wearing.
As a result
, the poor
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student
can be bullying and criticized.
Secondly
,
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students
do not
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have to
waste a colossal time to choose clothes which should
be worn
tomorrow.

In conclusion
, this essay
inevitably
support the
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idea
that
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uniforms
can not
be abandoned
in all
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schools
. From my point of view, wearing
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uniform
at
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school
is the best options to discipline
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students
.
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IELTS essay School uniforms should be abolished in all schools. Discuss to what extent you agree or disagree with this statement

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
270 words
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