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school organization system comparison

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The essay raises the issue of school organization system in the United States. The writer explains the basic school division into primary grades, intermediate grades and secondary grades in pupils aged 6 to 18. The lecturer questions the effectiveness of such system and continues to discuss the problems associated with it. First, the author states that the separation of students into the aforesaid grades are based on chronological age. The lecturer discusses how such classification fails to take into account individual social, physical and mental readiness of students. secondly, the essay mentions the repetition process that the students who do not succeed to meet the required qualifications have to undertake. The lecturer explains how this can lead to boredom, poor self-concept and dropout in the mentioned group of students. He then points out the different paces of learning in individual students and how standardized tests fail to measure these differences.

The essay raises the issue of school organization system in the United States. The writer This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interprets
explains
 the basic school division into primary You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcategoryclassificationdegreelevelstandardquality
grades
, intermediate You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcategoryclassificationdegreelevelstandardquality
grades
 and secondary You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcategoryclassificationdegreelevelstandardquality
grades
 in pupils aged 6 to 18. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
 lecturer questions the effectiveness of such system and continues to discuss the problems associated with it.

First
, the author states that the separation of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 into the aforesaid You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcategoryclassificationdegreelevelstandardquality
grades
are based
 on chronological age. The lecturer discusses how such classification fails to take into account individual social, physical and mental readiness of students.

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secondly
, the essay mentions the repetition process that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 who do not succeed to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 the required qualifications This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 undertake. The lecturer This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interprets
explains
 how this can lead to boredom, poor self-concept and dropout in the mentioned group of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
. He then points out the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 paces of learning in individual You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 and how standardized This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evaluates
tests
 fail to measure these differences. 