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Sarah has been lost and we found her

Sarah has been lost and we found her Nmnj0
1. I wish I hadn't forgotten an umbrella. 2. She wish she could said him about her feelings. 3. They went to amesument park and ate pizza. Latter on they went to Jack's house to watch movie. 4. They saw Sarah with her "ex" boyfriend snorring on the coutch. 5. She wish she would have gun to shot her! 1. I wish I wasn't busy. If I wasn't busy we would have gone somewthere. 2. I wish we would have done something yesterday. But we were too shocked to -done- do something. 3. I wish Jack could -have- earn -ed- more money. We need money so badly. 4. I wish Jack would -have- chang -ed- his mind. I hope he will change his decision. Hi there! It was a funny day yesterday. But I say "funny" in sarcastic way. It was poudring. My car won't start. I was waiting for a bus, thinking: "I wish I hadn't forgotten unbrella", when Jack called to talk. I said to him that I late to studies, and he said that he can drive me, no problem. I know that I decided to avoid him while I'm not sure about my feelings. And here we go again, I'm in his car. He hadn't had any plans so he invite me to have a walk after studies. Sure, it would be looked strange if I said no. That's why I accepted, thinking: "I wish I wasn't afraid to tell him about my feelings. I wish he could read my minds". I didn't know what wait from this "no date". We went to the amesument park, and, by the way, it was fun. Later on we decided to take a pizza and watch the film in Jack's house. But when we open the front door, there she was! Sarah in splash! With her "ex" boyfriend Jerm! They both snoring on the coutch. . God, I'm so mad at her even now! I wish I had a gun to shot her!
1. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wish
I hadn't forgotten an umbrella.

2. She
The pronoun 'She' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "wishes", "wished".
wish
she could
'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean "told"?
said
him about her feelings.

3. They went to
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amesument
park and ate pizza. Latter on they went to Jack's
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house
to
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watch
movie.

4. They
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saw
Sarah with her
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"
ex
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"
boyfriend
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snorring
on the
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coutch
.

5. She
The pronoun 'She' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "wishes", "wished".
wish
she would have gun to shot her!

1. I
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wish
I wasn't busy.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
I wasn't busy we would have gone
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somewthere
.

2. I
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wish
we would have done something yesterday.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
we were too shocked to -done- do something.

3. I
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wish
Jack could -have- earn -ed- more money. We need money
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so
badly
.

4. I
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wish
Jack would -have
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- chang
-ed- his mind. I hope he will
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change
his decision.

Hi there! It was a
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funny
day yesterday.
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But
I say
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"
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funny
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"
in sarcastic way. It was
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poudring
. My car won't
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start
. I was waiting for a bus, thinking:
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"
I
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wish
I hadn't forgotten
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unbrella
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"
, when Jack called to talk. I said to him that I late to studies, and he said that he can drive me, no problem.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
know that I decided to avoid him while I'm not sure about my feelings. And
Sarcasm can be deemed as rude. Consider alternatives.
here we go again
, I'm in his car. He hadn't had any plans
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "invites", "invited".
invite
me to have a walk after studies. Sure, it would
be looked
strange if I said no. That's why I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
, thinking:
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"
I
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wish
I wasn't afraid to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
him about my feelings. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wish
he could read my minds
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
. I didn't know what wait from this
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
no date
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
.

We went to the
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amesument
park, and, by the way, it was fun. Later on we decided to take a pizza and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
the film in Jack's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
when we open the front door, there she was! Sarah in splash! With her
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
ex
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
boyfriend
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Jerm
!

They both snoring on the
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coutch
.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
God, I'm
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so
mad at her even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
! I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wish
I had a gun to shot her!
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IELTS essay Sarah has been lost and we found her

Essay
  American English
14 paragraphs
334 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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