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Sandy wedding decor dementia spend more money on top facility for top at later there are you there that is money should be spent on sports facilities for ordinary people discuss both the view and give your own opinion

Sandy wedding decor dementia spend more money on top facility for top at later there are you there that is money should be spent on sports facilities for ordinary people discuss both the view and give your own opinion gxMn1
In Modern era sports plays a vital role in society for that government allocates a proportion of their budget on sports facility therefore some people think that government finance more capital to top athletes however other believe that government should finance for common people while I believe that most pending for top athletes is beneficial of to some extent I also argue that some proportion of money should finance for other people because they are the future of that countries. To commence with sports person represent our country on various platforms due to this they do more practice and enhance their fitness level as a result they become champions in various platforms such as Olympic cricket and many other sports for Japan USA and Australia win more medal as compared to other countries because of spending on high rated athletes despite of that benefit after that athlete youth cannot become top athletes this leads to significant loss to that country. On the other hand in present time more and more people attract with sports due to Fame in TV and newspaper in addition to these people want to develop their skills and also choose as a career path because of him and recognition for example government should organise sports event in different states and give proper training to them as a result they also represent our country for other people should contribute money in the form of text that they have right to utilise that facilities. In conclusion although there are differences in people's opinion in regard to sports facilities I strongly believe that government should spend equal amount of money on top athletes and for ordinary people.
In Modern era
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sports
plays a vital role in society for that
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government
allocates a proportion of their budget on
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sports
facility
therefore
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some
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people
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think
that
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government
finance more capital to
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top
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athletes
however
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other
believe that
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government
should finance for common
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people
while I believe that most pending for
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top
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athletes
is beneficial of to
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some
extent I
also
argue that
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some
proportion of money should finance for
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other
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people
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because
they are the future of that countries.

To commence with
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sports
person represent our country on various platforms due to this they do more practice and enhance their fitness level
as a result
they become champions in various platforms such as Olympic cricket and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
for Japan USA and Australia win more medal as compared to
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other
countries
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because
of spending on high rated
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athletes
Did you mean "despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
despite of
that benefit after that
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athlete
youth cannot become
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top
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athletes
this leads to significant loss to that country.

On the
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other
hand in present time more and more
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people
attract with
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sports
due to Fame in TV and newspaper
in addition
to these
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people
want to develop their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and
also
choose as a career path
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because
of him and recognition
for example
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government
should
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organise
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sports
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event
in
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different
states and give proper training to them
as a result
they
also
represent our country for
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other
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people
should contribute money in the form of text that they have right to
Possible spelling mistake. 'utilise' is British English.
utilise
that facilities.

In conclusion
although there are differences in
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people
's opinion in regard to
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sports
facilities I
strongly
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should spend equal amount of money on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
top
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
athletes
and for ordinary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
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IELTS essay Sandy wedding decor dementia spend more money on top facility for top at later there are you there that is money should be spent on sports facilities for ordinary people discuss both the view and give your own opinion

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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