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Salary or job satisfaction:the most important consideration when choosing job or career is a having high income.

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Since the last decade, one of the common topics of debate is, should one be inclined toward a high salary profession or a profession that satisfies their inner-self. Some people are toward more pay whereas others giving the higher priority to a job satisfaction. I completely disagree with the first idea and I will elucidate my viewpoint with following arguments. On the one hand, big income maybe crucial because the following reasons. Firstly, every graduate from a university will expect to get a good salary when she or he comes out of it. As a result many graduates are willing to opt for a company wich offers a high salary. Secondly, based on financial conditions, some are forced to accept the job with high pay so that they can pay off their loans. Last but not least, todays society has made people that respect is earned only by having a luxury life. On the other hand, satisfaction is consider as the initator for our willingness to countinue it thus it can't be neglected. For example, when we don't get totally involved with the work we do, we frequently go low and couldn't do our best. In conclusion. Although high salary is important but satisfaction make us to stay at that job.
Since the last decade, one of the common topics of debate is, should one
be inclined
toward a
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profession or a profession that satisfies their inner-self.
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people
are toward more pay whereas others giving the higher priority to a job satisfaction. I completely disagree with the
first
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idea
and I will elucidate my viewpoint with following arguments. On the one hand,
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big
income maybe crucial
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the following reasons.
Firstly
, every graduate from a university will
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expect
to
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get
a
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when she or he
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comes
out of it.
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graduates are willing to opt for a
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company
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wich
offers a
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Secondly
, based on financial conditions,
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are forced
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pay
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that they can pay off their loans. Last
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todays
society has made
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people
that respect
is earned
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only
by having a luxury life.
On the other hand
, satisfaction is
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as the
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initator
for our willingness to
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countinue
it
thus
it can't
be neglected
.
For example
, when we don't
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get
totally
involved with the work we do, we
frequently
go low and couldn't do our best.
In conclusion
. Although
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salary
is
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important
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satisfaction
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us to stay at that job.
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IELTS essay Salary or job satisfaction: the most important consideration when choosing job or career is a having high income.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
211 words
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