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Robots are taking all jobs all around the world. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Robots are taking all jobs all around the world. v. 1
Artificially intelligent robots are progressively replacing the humans in the workplace. While it is suggested that most of the menial obs will be taken by robots, few works which require human touch cannot be replaced. In my opinion, I consider that there are some jobs will be carried out by people. To embark on, robots take majir part of the work that does not require specific and complex human skills. In other words, many companies will turn to artificial intelligence because it is far less expensive as compared to hiring, training and employing a human. The supermarkets in Australia, for example, many cashiers have been replaced by these automated machines that cost less. In addition, they work around the clock and does not require holidays or holiday pay. For these reasons, jobs that can be replaced by robotic station will be replaced. On the other hand, there are some human jobs that cannot be replaced by these robots. Put simply, some work needs 'human touch'. These jobs include medicines, psychology, education and social work where physical interaction is mandatory. For instance, to cure some disease it is needed that diagnosis of disease should be done by human doctor as having similar family. Thus, robots will never be able to achieve social bonding. To conclude, most of the human employment will be overtaken by robots. Unskilled labour will eventually be done entirely by artificial machines, however, the job that require human specific skills will always exist. In my opinion, very few human jobs will be safe in increasing artificially intelligent workforce.
Artificially
intelligent robots are
progressively
replacing the
humans
in the workplace. While it
is suggested
that most of the menial obs will
be taken
by robots, few works which
require
human
touch cannot
be replaced
. In my opinion, I consider that there are
some
jobs
will
be carried
out by
people
.

To embark on, robots take
majir
part of the
work
that does not
require
specific and complex
human
skills
.
In other words
,
many
companies
will turn to artificial intelligence
because
it is far less expensive as compared to hiring, training and employing a
human
. The supermarkets in Australia,
for example
,
many
cashiers have
been replaced
by these automated machines that cost less.
In addition
, they
work
around the clock and does not
require
holidays or holiday pay. For these reasons,
jobs
that can
be replaced
by robotic station will
be replaced
.

On the other hand
, there are
some
human
jobs
that cannot
be replaced
by these robots. Put
simply
,
some
work
needs 'human touch'. These
jobs
include medicines, psychology, education and social
work
where physical interaction is mandatory.
For instance
, to cure
some
disease it
is needed
that diagnosis of disease should
be done
by
human
doctor as having similar family.
Thus
, robots will never be able to achieve social bonding.

To conclude
, most of the
human
employment will
be overtaken
by robots. Unskilled
labour
will
eventually
be done
entirely
by artificial machines,
however
, the
job
that
require
human
specific
skills
will always exist. In my opinion,
very
few
human
jobs
will be safe in increasing
artificially
intelligent workforce.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Robots are taking all jobs all around the world. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.5
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