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The film companies are an enormous industry that have develop instant millionaires and some red numbers bank accounts. In the following essay it is review the different situations that made a film successful or a failure. Currently the cinemas standardised the public expectations in four types of movies: Firstly, the action or fiction movie developed by Disney, DC or Marvel comics. Secondly, the animated movies and the obvious children´s choice. Thirdly, the scary movie, it could be a trilogy, remake or independent. Finally, the romantic, comic, documental or independent film. The 80% of this films costs millions, and are developed by powerful producers that expect millions of sales too. However, in the films history had been grate failures of expensive, for instance, Green Lantern, The Last Air Bender or even the Jhonny Deep´s Lone Ranger. The stories could not be well developed, the script were so boring or time to release the film was not the correct, the general opinion is that this films failure. On the other hand, most of independent films are developed with a short budget and unknown actors; besides some of this movies were superb, that is the case of June, Beautiful Life or the Blair Witch Project. In my opinion, the money does not transform a simple movie into a blockbuster there are more relevant facts. For example, the time when a movie is released is as important as the actors, due to it could de affected by the schedule of the blockbusters or special holydays like Christmas. It is concluding that the cost of a movie does not guarantee their success, the duty of the producers is the searching of public enjoy watching the movies and give their sincere opinion.
The film
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companies
are an enormous industry that have
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develop
instant millionaires and
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some
red numbers bank accounts. In the following essay it is review the
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different
situations that made a film successful or a failure.

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Currently
the cinemas
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standardised
the public expectations in four types of
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movies
:
Firstly
, the action or fiction
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movie
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developed
by Disney, DC or
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Marvel comics
.
Secondly
, the animated
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movies
and the obvious
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children´s
choice.
Thirdly
, the scary
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movie
, it could be a trilogy, remake or independent.
Finally
, the romantic, comic,
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documental
or independent film.

The 80% of
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this
films costs millions, and are
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developed
by powerful producers that
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expect
millions of sales too.
However
, in the
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films
history had been grate failures of expensive,
for instance
, Green Lantern, The Last Air Bender or even the
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Jhonny
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Deep´s
Lone Ranger. The stories could not be well
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developed
, the script were
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so
boring or time to release the film was not the correct, the general opinion is that this films failure.

On the other hand
, most of independent films are
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developed
with a short budget and unknown actors;
besides
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some
of
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this
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movies
were superb,
that is
the case of June,
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Beautiful
Life or the Blair Witch Project.

In my opinion, the money does not transform a simple
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movie
into a blockbuster there are more relevant facts.
For example
, the time when a
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movie
is released
is as
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important
as the actors, due to it could
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de
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affected
by the schedule of the blockbusters or special
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holydays
like Christmas. It is concluding that the cost of a
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movie
does not guarantee their success, the duty of the producers is the searching of public enjoy watching the
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movies
and give their sincere opinion.
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IELTS essay review the different situations that made a film successful or a failure

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