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Responsibilities of businesses

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Businesses have always sought to make a profit, but it is becoming increasingly common to hear people talk about the social obligations that companies have. I completely agree with the idea that businesses should do more for society than simply make money. On the one hand, I accept that businesses must make money in order to survive in a competitive world. It seems logical that the priority of any company should be to cover its running costs, such as employees’ wages and payments for buildings and utilities. On top of these costs, companies also need to invest in improvements and innovations if they wish to remain successful. If a company is unable to pay its bills or meet the changing needs of customers, any concerns about social responsibilities become irrelevant. In other words, a company can only make a positive contribution to society if it is in good financial health. On the other hand, companies should not be run with the sole aim of maximizing profit; they have a wider role to play in society. One social obligation that owners and managers have is to treat their employees well, rather than exploiting them. For example, they could pay a “living wage” to ensure that workers have a good quality of life. I also like the idea that businesses could use a proportion of their profits to support local charities, environmental projects, or education initiatives. Finally, instead of trying to minimize their tax payments by using accounting loopholes, I believe that company bosses should be happy to contribute to society through the tax system. In conclusion, I believe that companies should place as much importance on their social responsibilities as they do on their financial objectives.
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have always sought to
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make
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increasingly
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social
obligations that
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companies
have. I completely
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agree
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businesses
should do more for
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society
than
simply
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make
money.

On the one hand, I accept that
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businesses
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must
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make
money in order to survive in a competitive world. It seems logical that the priority of any
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company
should be to cover its running costs, such as employees’ wages and payments for buildings and utilities. On top of these costs,
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companies
also
need to invest in improvements and innovations if they wish to remain successful. If a
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company
is unable to pay its bills or
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meet
the changing needs of customers, any concerns about
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social
responsibilities become irrelevant.
In other words
, a
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company
can
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a
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positive
contribution to
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society
if it is in
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good
financial health.

On the other hand
,
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companies
should not
be run
with the sole aim of maximizing profit; they have a wider role to play in
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society
. One
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social
obligation that owners and managers have is to treat their employees well,
rather
than exploiting them.
For example
, they could pay a “living wage” to ensure that workers have a
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good
quality of life. I
also
like the
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idea
that
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businesses
could
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use
a proportion of their profits to support local charities, environmental projects, or education initiatives.
Finally
,
instead
of trying to minimize their tax payments by using accounting loopholes, I believe that
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company
bosses should be happy to contribute to
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society
through the tax system.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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companies
should place as much importance on their
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social
responsibilities as they do on their financial objectives.

IELTS essay Responsibilities of businesses

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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