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Reserving a certain percentage of high jobs for women.

Reserving a certain percentage of high jobs for women. KwV10

In general, men are preferred over women for important jobs or high-level positions. However, over the last years, there has been a significant amount of women who have been willing to change this, demanding gender equality at work. Moreover, it is thought that the government should actually reserve some jobs for women, so that the number of men and women working shoulder to shoulder is almost the same. First of all, facts show that the number of female working in high-level jobs is very limited compared to the male counterpart. Even though this is widely known all over the world, some people refuse to believe this as they consider that women are not capable enough of doing what has always been acknowledged to be a “male job”, like running a business. Thus, it is sometimes believed that women are not well-prepared or do not have enough skills so that they can work, which is not true at all. In order to change this mentality, women should definitely be encouraged to carry out important jobs but to compete for them. To conclude, I strongly believe that women should work in high-level positions just as much as men, but I don’t think that this is a viable solution. Not only is it quite unfair for males, but as women, we have to show that we are worth as much as men.

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men
are preferred
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women
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important
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jobs
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women
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change
 this, demanding gender equality at work. Moreover
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thought
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government
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some
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jobs
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women
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so
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men
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women
 working shoulder to shoulder is almost the same.

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show
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people
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women
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enough
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job”
, like running a business.

Thus
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sometimes
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women
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enough
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skills
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that they can work, which is not true at all. In order to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 this mentality, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermothershe
women
 should definitely be encouraged
 to carry out This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskappointmentofficebusinesscareerassignment
jobs
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 to compete for them.

To conclude
, I strongly
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women
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just
 as much as You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfatherbrothersonguyfellowhusband
men
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
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think
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only
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but
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women
, we This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 that we are worth as much as You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfatherbrothersonguyfellowhusband
men
. 