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Research shows that overeating can be just as harmful as smoking. Thus the advertising of certain food products should be banned, as cigarette is banned in many countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Research shows that overeating can be just as harmful as smoking. Thus the advertising of certain food products should be banned, as cigarette is banned in many countries. GWo1L
It is considered by experts that the lifestyle of people has been effect owing of overeating not it brings positive impact on individuals life. Prohibiting the advertisements pertaining to food like cigarette which have adverse impact on people's life as smoking. I entirely agree with this statement. This essay will discuss my views in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with why advertisements should be banned. The most prominent reason it attractive masses toward food that have detrimental impact, especially children. To clear it, when television as well as internet is seen by kids that time these ads allure the mind of children because of this not only they insist their parents to eat fast food but also this food is not eaten by them in limit. Let us take pizza, for epitome, preference of this food day by day has been inclined because of advertisements. The taste of food comple to masses to eat more which creates plenty of problems in life. Hence, it is thought ads should be prohibited like cigarette. The other reason which support this view point is that through ads people know about product and they try to it. To explain it, it could be seen that people flooded with pelthora of ads regaeding food. People have curious to check the taste of food. The taste of food comple to people to eat more. For instance, in Australia, owing of banned advertisements, 70% people who people away from cigarette that's why researchers want to prohibit the food related advertisements. To conclude, although people have own choice to eat anything but I think if fast food advertisements must be banned masses may ignore the food that effect health of people.
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people
has been effect owing of overeating not it brings
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positive
impact on
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individuals
life. Prohibiting the
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advertisements
pertaining to
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food
like cigarette which have adverse impact on
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people
's life as smoking. I
entirely
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agree
with this statement. This essay will discuss my views in forthcoming paragraphs.

To commence with why
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advertisements
should
be banned
. The most prominent reason it attractive masses toward
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food
that have detrimental impact,
especially
children. To
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clear
it, when television
as well
as internet is
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seen
by kids that time these ads allure the mind of children
because of this
not
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only
they insist their parents to
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eat
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fast
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food
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but
also
this
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food
is not eaten by them in limit.
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food
day by day has
been inclined
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because
of
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advertisements
. The taste of
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food
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comple
to masses to
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eat
more which creates
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plenty
of problems in life.
Hence
, it is
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thought
ads should
be prohibited
like cigarette.

The other reason which support this view point is that through ads
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people
know about
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product and
they try to it. To
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it, it could be
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seen
that
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people
flooded with
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pelthora
of ads
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regaeding
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food
.
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People
have curious to
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check
the taste of
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food
. The taste of
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food
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comple
to
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people
to
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eat
more.
For instance
, in Australia, owing of banned
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advertisements
, 70%
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people
who
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people
away from cigarette that's why researchers want to prohibit the
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food
related advertisements.

To conclude
, although
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people
have
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own
choice to
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eat
anything
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but
I
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think
if
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fast
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food
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advertisements
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must
be banned
masses may
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ignore
the
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food
that effect health of
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people
.
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IELTS essay Research shows that overeating can be just as harmful as smoking. Thus the advertising of certain food products should be banned, as cigarette is banned in many countries.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.0
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