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Renting your room in your apartment to a student

Renting your room in your apartment to a student 1A0eA
I am postgraduate student in your University, there is space in my apartment where a student can rent my space. The room is attached with bathroom and one small study area. The rooms will be cleaned every week by servant maid and we everyday offer breakfast and dinner for the student, lunch has to be taken care by the student. We have car parking facilities for the student which is all included in the rent. The rent is so cheap that every student may wish to occupy as soon as possible
I
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am postgraduate
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student
in your University, there is space in my apartment where a
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student
can rent my space. The room
is attached
with bathroom and one
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small
study area. The rooms will
be cleaned
every week by servant
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maid and
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we everyday
offer breakfast and dinner for the
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student
, lunch
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has to
be taken
care by the
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student
. We have car parking facilities for the
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student
which is all included in the rent. The rent is
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so
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cheap
that every
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student
may wish to occupy as
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soon
as
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possible

IELTS essay Renting your room in your apartment to a student

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
90 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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