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Acecook's social activities

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I'm here to tell you about Acecook's social activities for about 2 minutes or so. As Acecook's mission has set out "Through cuisine to contribute to Vietnamese society". During the time of social distancing, I guess you have heard many times about charity activities. With the spirit of wanting to help society, Acecook is one of the leading businesses in this activity. Thousands of food packages were sent to isolated areas and field hospitals. Always try to produce during the epidemic season to provide enough food for the people. Not only that, but 20 billion VND (and probably more), the money that Acecook has contributed to the government to support epidemic control. And now I will move on to another, a great activity about music, around 6 years up to now, Acecook has been actively organizing project to preserve and develop the values of classical music like "Acecook happiness concert". Acecook not only shows its strong position in the food market but also as an enterprise that brings good values to whole society. And that's all I want to tell you.
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's social
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Acecook
's mission has set out
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Through cuisine to contribute to Vietnamese society
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. During the time of social distancing, I guess you have heard
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many
times about charity
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activities
. With the spirit of wanting to
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help
society,
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Acecook
is one of the leading businesses in this
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activity
. Thousands of food packages were
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sent
to isolated areas and field hospitals. Always try to produce during the epidemic season to provide
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enough
food for the
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people
. Not
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only
that,
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20 billion VND (and
probably
more), the money that
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Acecook
has contributed to the
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government
to support epidemic control.

And
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now
I will
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on to another, a great
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activity
about music, around 6 years up to
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now
,
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Acecook
has been
actively
organizing project to preserve and develop the values of classical music like
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"
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Acecook
happiness concert
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"
.

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Acecook
not
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shows
its strong position in the food market
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also
as an enterprise that brings
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good
values to whole society. And that's all I want to
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IELTS essay Acecook's social activities

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
181 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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