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REGARDING ACCOMMODATION CHANGE

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THIS IS WITH REGARD TO THE SUBJECT MENTIONED ABOVE THAT I WANT TO CHANGE MY ROOM IN COLLEGE HOSTEL. CURRENTLY, I AM LIVING WITH A ROOMMATE WHOSE BRANCH IS INFORMATION & TECHNOLOGY AND MY BRANCH IS ELECTRICAL, WE BOTH SHARE DIFFERENT SUBJECT AND STUDIES, OUR MENTAL LEVEL IS TOTALLY DIFFERENT. BEING AN STUDENT FROM ELECTRICAL ENGINEERING BRANCH I AM VERY SERIOUS AND CONCERN ABOUT THE STUDIES, IT IS NOT ONLY DIFFICULT BRANCH BUT REQUIRE SINCERITY AND CONCENTRATION. IT WOULD BE GREAT IF SOME PEER GROUP RELATED TO SAME STUDY WOULD BE MY ROOM MATE. I WOULD LIKE A SINGLE ROOM WHERE I CAN GIVE MORE TIME TO STUDIES AND FOCUS MYSELF ON MY SUBJECTS THOROUGHLY OR SHARING ROOM WITH THE STUDENT OF SAME BRANCH. SUCH THAT WE BOTH CAN STUDY TOGETHER AND CAN RELATE TO PROBLEMS IN THE STUDIES. I WOULD BE VERY THANKFUL TO YOU IF YOU COULD PERSONALLY INTERVENE AND SORT THIS MATTER AS SOON AS POSSIBLE.
THIS IS WITH REGARD TO THE SUBJECT MENTIONED ABOVE THAT I WANT TO
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MY
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IN COLLEGE HOSTEL.
CURRENTLY
, I AM LIVING WITH A ROOMMATE WHOSE
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BRANCH
IS INFORMATION & TECHNOLOGY AND MY
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BRANCH
IS ELECTRICAL, WE BOTH SHARE
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DIFFERENT
SUBJECT AND
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STUDIES
, OUR MENTAL LEVEL IS
TOTALLY
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DIFFERENT
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BEING AN STUDENT FROM ELECTRICAL ENGINEERING
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BRANCH
I AM
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VERY
SERIOUS AND CONCERN ABOUT THE
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STUDIES
, IT IS NOT
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ONLY
DIFFICULT
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BRANCH
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REQUIRE SINCERITY AND CONCENTRATION. IT WOULD BE GREAT IF
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SOME
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PEER
GROUP RELATED TO SAME
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STUDY
WOULD BE MY
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ROOM
MATE.

I WOULD LIKE A SINGLE
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ROOM
WHERE I CAN GIVE MORE TIME TO
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STUDIES
AND FOCUS MYSELF ON MY SUBJECTS
THOROUGHLY
OR SHARING
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ROOM
WITH THE STUDENT OF SAME
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BRANCH
. SUCH THAT WE BOTH CAN
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STUDY
TOGETHER AND CAN RELATE TO PROBLEMS IN THE STUDIES.

I WOULD BE
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VERY
THANKFUL TO YOU IF YOU COULD
PERSONALLY
INTERVENE AND SORT THIS MATTER AS
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SOON
AS POSSIBLE.
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IELTS essay REGARDING ACCOMMODATION CHANGE

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
159 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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