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Recently scientists worried about climate change have urged governments to introduce measures to reduce the greenhouse gas emissions that are seen as its main

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Recently scientists worried about climate change have urged governments to introduce measures to reduce the greenhouse gas emissions that are seen as its main cause. Simultaneously, politicians and environmentalists have urged individuals to make changes to their lifestyle. I shall argue that governments and individuals should take join responsibility for this problem. Firstly, industry accounts for a large proportion of the greenhouse gas emissions, and this can only be controlled by government action. Measures could be taken to discourage pollution, such as limiting or taxing the use of fossil fuels. Alternatively, subsidies could be offered to industries to clean up their production processes. If these ideas were adopted, I believe that businesses would regard pollution as a financial issue. Secondly, only discussion between governments can ensure that solutions are successful. The Kyoto agreement, for example, tried to reach global agreement on how to address the problem. Without such co-operating, it seems to me that efforts to reduce fuel consumption are unlikely to be effective. However, national and international policies will only succeed if individuals also change their lifestyle. For example, people could think more carefully about how they use energy in their homes. By using less electricity, installing energy-efficient light bulbs and electrical appliances, or investing in solar panels, individuals can make a real difference. In addition, I think individual attitudes to transport need to change. Instead of making short tips by car, people could choose to walk, cycle, or take a bus. Since cars are a major source of the problem, changing our behavior in this area would have a major impact. In conclusion, I would maintain that only a combination of international agreement, national policies, and changes in individual behavior will succeed in preventing further damage to the environment.
Recently scientists worried about climate
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have urged
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governments
to

introduce measures to
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reduce
the greenhouse gas emissions that are
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seen
as its main

cause.
Simultaneously
, politicians and environmentalists have urged
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individuals
to

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make
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changes
to their lifestyle. I shall argue that
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governments
and
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individuals
should

take
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join
responsibility for this problem.

Firstly
, industry accounts for a large proportion of the greenhouse gas emissions,

and this can
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only
be controlled
by
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government
action. Measures could
be taken
to

discourage pollution, such as limiting or taxing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of fossil fuels.
Alternatively
,

subsidies could
be offered
to

industries to clean up their production processes. If these
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ideas
were adopted
, I

believe that businesses would regard pollution as a financial issue.

Secondly
,
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only
discussion between
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governments
can ensure that solutions are

successful. The Kyoto agreement,
for example
, tried to reach global agreement on

how to address the problem. Without such co-operating, it seems to me that efforts

to
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reduce
fuel consumption are unlikely to be effective.

However
, national and international policies will
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only
succeed if
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individuals
also


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change
their lifestyle.
For example
,
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people
could
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think
more
carefully
about how

they
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use
energy in their

homes. By using less electricity, installing energy-efficient light bulbs and electrical

appliances, or investing in solar panels,
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individuals
can
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make
a real difference.

In addition
, I
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think
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individual
attitudes to transport need to
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change
.
Instead
of

making short tips by car,
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people
could choose to walk, cycle, or take a bus. Since

cars are a major source of the problem, changing our behavior in this area would

have a major impact.

In conclusion
, I would maintain that
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only
a combination of international agreement,

national policies, and
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changes
in
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individual
behavior will succeed in preventing

further
damage to the environment.
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IELTS essay Recently scientists worried about climate change have urged governments to introduce measures to reduce the greenhouse gas emissions that are seen as its main

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