Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion. v.9

Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion. v. 9
The debate whether it is a good or bad sign that today people are more inclined towards going to a different country for either work or vacation, has become a matter of discussion for many. Personally, I believe that there several reasons behind this development. In this essay, I shall analyse this topic and outline relevant examples to illustrate the consequences of this trend. To start with, one of the main reasons for this change is the ease and affordability of the modern transportation. Firstly, in the last decade, due to the advancements made in the technology, the entire face of the airline industry has been transformed completely. Today, the cost of an airline ticket is much cheaper than a train ticket. This has resulted in a higher number of the people who could now afford to travel overseas. For example, a recent study conducted at the Stanford University, showed that ever since the prices of the air travel has gone down, there has been a continuous growth in the airline market. However, this trend has also bought some unpleasant outcomes. First, the amount of the air pollution due to this rise in the number of air traffic, has grown immensely. Also, the rise in the consumption of the fossil fuel is now a global issue. Lastly, as more people are travelling and relocating in foreign countries, the economy of many countries is getting negatively affected. In conclusion, this is a topic which raises many questions in the contemporary life. After thorough examination of the subject, and taking the given examples into consideration. It is safe to say, that is the future, we could expect to witness some notable changes in this direction.
The debate whether it is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sign
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are more inclined towards going to a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
country for either work or vacation, has become a matter of discussion for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
.
Personally
, I believe that there several reasons behind this development. In this essay, I shall
Possible spelling mistake. 'analyse' is British English.
analyse
this topic and outline relevant examples to illustrate the consequences of this trend.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with, one of the main reasons for this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
and affordability of the modern transportation.
Firstly
, in the last decade, due to the advancements made in the technology, the entire face of the airline industry has
been transformed
completely.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Today
, the cost of an airline ticket is much cheaper than a train ticket. This has resulted in a higher number of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
afford to travel overseas.
For example
, a recent study conducted at the Stanford University,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that ever since the prices of the air travel has gone down, there has been a continuous growth in the airline market.

However
, this trend has
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
unpleasant outcomes.
First
, the amount of the air pollution due to this rise in the number of air traffic, has grown
immensely
.
Also
, the rise in the consumption of the fossil fuel is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
a global issue.
Lastly
, as more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are travelling and relocating in foreign countries, the economy of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
countries is getting
negatively
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
.

In conclusion
, this is a topic which raises
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
questions in the contemporary life. After thorough examination of the subject, and taking the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
examples into consideration. It is safe to say,
that is
the future, we could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
to witness
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
notable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in this direction.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts