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Reasons for highly qualified graduates being unemployed

Reasons for highly qualified graduates being unemployed 7Wd66
Many graduates are probably excited to get out into the world and start their career. Unfortunately, the unemployment rate for recent highly qualified graduates has increased over the past few years in many countries. There are some factors affecting the rate of unemployment of these students including the less job opportunities available and the high expectations of employers. This phenomenon can be prescribed to many other principal factors. Students graduating from college may not have enough experience and much knowledge to apply for jobs. For example, a university student is applying for a job that is slightly different from what they have been trained for. Employers these days have higher expectations, such as candidates must have a minimum of two foreign languages, and have relevant work experience. Apart from that, the wages offered by employers are low and the developments in technology and working practices have begun to have a negative influence on existing employment opportunities for graduates. Companies are expecting a highly competitive worker with a minimum wage. This is because new technologies have helped them to make goods of services faster than that of humans. This can be surpassingly demotivating and many talented young professionals choose to be unemployed. In my opinion, the only way to solve this problem is to encourage people to seek employment with support from the government. Government should introduce new regulations for providing employment funds and services, and universities must encourage their students and introduce them to the jobs the students will face in the real world.
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opportunities available and the high expectations of employers.

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graduating from college may not have
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enough
experience and much knowledge to apply for
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student
is applying for a
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that is
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different
from what they have
been trained
for. Employers these days have higher expectations, such as candidates
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must
have a minimum of two foreign languages, and have relevant work experience.

Apart from that, the wages offered by employers are low and the developments in technology and working practices have begun to have a
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negative
influence on existing employment opportunities for graduates.
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Companies
are expecting a
highly
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new technologies have
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helped
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many
talented young professionals choose to
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In my opinion, the
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only
way to solve this problem is to encourage
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people
to seek employment with support from the
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government
.
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Government
should introduce new regulations for providing employment funds and services, and universities
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encourage their
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and introduce them to the
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will face in the real world.
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IELTS essay Reasons for highly qualified graduates being unemployed

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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