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First and foremost, the major reason for this personal choice is the fact that individuals are seeking better opportunities for jobs and studies since their home countries could be having economic predicament and poor education system. In addition, when a person takes this decision, she is looking not only for job satisfaction and a work-life balance, also for a safe place to live with their children, where there will have security and an efficient education system. On the other hand, several difficulties are associated with immigration. The initial problem referred to culture shock due to the difference between new culture and have accustomed culture, The difference is felt as soon as a person steps off the plane. Furthermore, making a quick adjustment is another pressing problem around immigration, It takes a person a while to get used to the new lifestyle. for instance, there is the pressure to work harder and do more, cause’ everyone is running around doing so much.
First
and foremost, the major reason for this personal choice is the fact that individuals are seeking better opportunities for jobs and studies since their home countries could be having economic predicament and poor education system.
In addition
, when a person takes this decision, she is looking not
only
for job satisfaction and a work-life balance,
also
for a safe place to
live
with their children, where there will have security and an efficient education system.

On the other hand
, several difficulties
are associated
with immigration. The initial problem referred to culture shock due to the difference between new culture and have accustomed culture, The difference
is felt
as
soon
as a person steps off the
plane
.
Furthermore
, making a quick adjustment is another pressing problem around immigration, It takes a person a while to
get
used
to the new lifestyle.
for
instance, there is the pressure to work harder and do more, cause’ everyone is running around doing
so
much.
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IELTS essay reason and problem of immigration

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