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Reading- dreaming with eyes open

Reading- dreaming with eyes open Y2A2m
I first got interested in reading in 7th grade. I participated in a reading competition and won second place. I didn't really like to read storybooks therefore, I loved poetry. I understood that I enjoyed reading when I read my second book, it was ''The Little Prince'. ' The plot of the story captivated me so much that I started to imagine a possible continuation of that book. I felt like I lived in that era and also, my mom told me she noticed that I become more open-minded after that competition When the summer started, I went to the library and took 7 books and in 2 weeks I have already finished them, it was amazing, I started to feel the power of reading. Most of my free time I have spent reading all kinds of books, but I find myself in romantic books because I see them being really satisfying and relaxing, also is fascinating how many things they thought me about love.
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first
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interested in
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reading
in 7th grade. I participated in a
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competition and won second place.
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didn't
really
like to read storybooks
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understood that I enjoyed
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reading
when I read my second
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book
, it was ''The
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Little
Prince'. ' The plot of the story captivated me
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so
much that I
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started
to imagine a possible continuation of that
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book
. I felt like I
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lived
in that era and
also
, my mom
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told
me she noticed that I become more open-minded after that
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competition


When the summer
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started
, I went to the library and took 7
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books
and in 2 weeks I have already finished them, it was amazing, I
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started
to feel the power of
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reading
. Most of my free time I have spent
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reading
all kinds of
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books
,
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but
I find myself in romantic
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books
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because
I
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see
them being
really
satisfying and relaxing,
also
is fascinating how
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many
things they
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thought
me about
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IELTS essay Reading- dreaming with eyes open

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
165 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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