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q3. The man expressed his opinion of the new meal plans. Report his opinion and ecplsin the reasons the he gives for having that opinion. v.1

q3. The man expressed his opinion of the new meal plans. Report his opinion and ecplsin the reasons the he gives for having that opinion. v. 1
It is sometimes argued that environment is destroyed by various problems, and the government, which responsibility to do protect the environment, not individual as they do not ability to solve this problem. I believe that both the government and individuals are equally important and they bring a great deal of benefit in our environment. On the one hand, the government plays a vital role in environmental protection. The earth is warming, and this major cause greenhouse gas; gases of it in the air trap energy from the sun, and this leads to the melting of the polar ice caps, and this leads to flooding. Because of this serious problem, it needs to big budget, so only the government can prevent this problem. Moreover, the government also introduces rule and regulation of protecting environment. In addition, the levels of punishment are applied to increase human awareness of improving polluted environment. On the one hand, individuals also play an important in the solution to polluting the environment. One by one have to increase awareness in take care environment because poor environmental quality leads to human health also be influenced. For instance, Vietnam is one of the nations that produce a large amount of waste, such as plastic bottle; therefor, people should reduce using it. In addition, we can recycle plastic bottles. Furthermore, people have to comply with government regulation of protecting environment. In order to reduce air pollution people should use cycling rather than means of transport because cycling is more environmentally friendly. In conclusion, both the government and individuals are equally vital to environmental protection. The efforts and cooperation of individuals and the government will help environment to be cleaner, and it ensures human health.
It is
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sometimes
argued that
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environment
is
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destroyed
by various
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problems
, and the
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government
, which responsibility to do protect the
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environment
, not
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individual
as they do not ability to solve this
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problem
. I believe that both the
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government
and
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individuals
are
equally
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important and
they bring a great deal of benefit in our environment.

On the one hand, the
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government
plays a vital role in environmental protection. The earth is warming, and this major cause greenhouse gas; gases of it in the air trap energy from the sun, and this leads to the melting of the polar ice caps, and this leads to flooding.
Because of this
serious
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problem
, it needs to
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big
budget,
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so
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only
the
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government
can
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prevent
this
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problem
.
Moreover
, the
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government
also
introduces
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rule
and regulation of protecting
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environment
.
In addition
, the levels of punishment
are applied
to increase human awareness of improving polluted environment.

On the one hand,
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individuals
also
play an
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important
in the solution to polluting the
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environment
. One by one
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have to
increase awareness in take care
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environment
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because
poor environmental quality leads to human health
also
be influenced
.
For instance
, Vietnam is one of the nations that produce a large amount of waste, such as plastic bottle; therefor,
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people
should
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reduce
using it.
In addition
, we can recycle plastic bottles.
Furthermore
,
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people
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have to
comply with
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government
regulation of protecting
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environment
. In order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
air pollution
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should
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use
cycling
rather
than means of transport
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because
cycling is more
environmentally
friendly.

In conclusion
, both the
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government
and
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individuals
are
equally
vital to environmental protection. The efforts and cooperation of
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individuals
and the
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government
will
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help
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environment
to be cleaner, and it ensures human health.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay q3. The man expressed his opinion of the new meal plans. Report his opinion and ecplsin the reasons the he gives for having that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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