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Protecting the environment is the responsibility of the government. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Protecting the environment is the responsibility of the government. v. 2
Many people consider that the task of taking care of the ecosystem is the sole obligation of the government. This essay believes otherwise for the accountability should be shared among all people. This essay will discuss whose duty it is to protect and preserve the surroundings. On the one hand, nature needs a total overhaul as it has been badly abused for the longest time. The governments of different nations are doing everything in their power to create and implement laws that will heighten the penalties for people who abuse the situation. However, it needs cooperation from the citizens in order to implement the different environmental policies. For instance, The Department of Environment and the Natural Resources in the Philippines in 2017 reported that the success of its program in arresting illegal loggers in Ormoc City is made possible with the help of residents along the mountainous terrains of Mt Isagani. On the other hand, more and more people are doing their best to save the climate. There are huge numbers of different non-government organizations that were formed because they believed that in their small little ways they could heal the deteriorating status of the planet. Many young adults are also interested in joining different kinds of fundraising events which uses the collected registration fees for the rehabilitation of certain affected areas. For example, Takbo SA Ilog Pasig in 2017, have gathered over 300 thousand runners with the intention to help restore the Pasig river. It collected almost 2 million pesos from its participants and benefactors. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the notice that the government should be the only responsible entity for the rehabilitation and protection of the habitat. This is a difficult battle as it needs the cooperation of both the government and its citizens in order to help and heal the wounded ecosystem.
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Many
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people
consider that the task of taking care of the ecosystem is the sole obligation of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
. This essay believes
otherwise
for the accountability should
be shared
among all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. This essay will discuss whose duty it is to protect and preserve the surroundings.

On the one hand, nature needs a total overhaul as it has been
badly
abused for the longest time. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
nations are doing everything in their power to create and implement laws that will heighten the penalties for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who abuse the situation.
However
, it needs cooperation from the citizens in order to implement the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
environmental policies.
For instance
, The Department of Environment and the Natural Resources in the Philippines in 2017 reported that the success of its program in arresting illegal loggers in
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Ormoc
City
is made
possible with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of residents along the mountainous terrains of Mt
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Isagani
.

On the other hand
, more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are doing their best to save the climate. There are huge numbers of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
non-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
organizations that
were formed
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because
they believed that in their
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small
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
ways they could heal the deteriorating status of the planet.
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Many
young adults are
also
interested in joining
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
kinds of fundraising
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
the collected registration fees for the rehabilitation of certain
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
areas.
For example
,
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Takbo
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SA Ilog
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Pasig
in 2017, have gathered over 300 thousand runners with the intention to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
restore the
Possible spelling mistake found.
Pasig
river. It collected almost 2 million pesos from its participants and benefactors.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
disagree with the notice that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should be the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
responsible entity for the rehabilitation and protection of the habitat. This is a difficult battle as it needs the cooperation of both the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
and its citizens in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
and heal the wounded ecosystem.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Protecting the environment is the responsibility of the government. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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