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Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems. v.1

Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems. v. 1
It is true that the issues related to the environmental pollution have become one of the most controversial issues nowadays, and every nation is wondering about how to tackle the problem. In my opinion, both government and people have to contribute to solve these problems or at least make it less menace. On one hand, everyone bears a greater duty to protect our environment. To begin with, parents at home and teachers at school should teach the next generation about how to cause less harm to our environment and how to take care of our mother Earth. Through teaching the children about recycling and reducing waste, both parents and teachers can contribute a lot. Also, people can reduce the gas emissions by using public transports rather than personal cars and can choose to walk short distances or to their workplaces. Moreover, by using fewer packages and less plastic and papers, they will reduce a massive threat to the environment. On the other hand, governments should take more efforts to reduce the pollution. Firstly, by making public transport more convenient to encourage more people to use them, this will save more money and energy. Secondly, through the media and campaign, many people can learn more about the importance of the environment. For example, in the UK there is a campaign called make Britain tidy and such campaign encourages people to contribute more to keep the environment clean. Finally, governments should introduce laws to limit the deforestation in many countries around the world, to ensure that there are enough green forests. To conclude, there are many ways in which we can address the issue of environmental pollution, and both individual and government have their own responsibility for this.
It is true that the issues related to the environmental pollution have become one of the most controversial issues nowadays, and every nation is wondering about how to tackle the problem. In my opinion, both
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government
and
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people
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have to
contribute to solve these problems or at least
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make
it less menace.

On one hand, everyone bears a greater duty to protect our
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environment
. To
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begin
with, parents at home and teachers at school should teach the
next
generation about how to cause less harm to our
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environment
and how to take care of our mother Earth. Through teaching the children about recycling and reducing waste, both parents and teachers can contribute a lot.
Also
,
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people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the gas emissions by using public transports
rather
than personal cars and can choose to walk short distances or to their workplaces.

Moreover
, by using fewer packages and less plastic and papers, they will
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reduce
a massive threat to the
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environment
.
On the other hand
,
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governments
should take more efforts to
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reduce
the pollution.
Firstly
, by making public transport more convenient to encourage more
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people
to
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use
them, this will save more money and energy.
Secondly
, through the media and campaign,
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many
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people
can learn more about the importance of the
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environment
.
For example
, in the UK there is a campaign called
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
Britain tidy and such campaign encourages
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people
to contribute more to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the
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environment
clean.
Finally
,
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governments
should introduce laws to limit the deforestation in
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many
countries around the world, to ensure that there are
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enough
green forests.

To conclude
, there are
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many
ways in which we can address the issue of environmental pollution, and both individual and
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government
have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
responsibility for this.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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