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Prison is the common way in most countries try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

If a person is caught with any of the crime then he/she will be locked up in the prison which is quite common in all the countries. However, providing education to these people will be better solution. This essay agrees with the statement as providing good education will transform the prisoner to follow in the right path and can avoid doing such crimes in the future. Secondly, some people may commit crime due to unemployment which can be decrease with proper education. Educating a prisoner rather than putting him/she behind the bars will help him to stop crimes in the future and also people may lead as an example in the society and can help others who got stuck with same situation. Learning will also help to know various crimes sections and also penalties behind that. This will reduce the crime rate in the country which will be beneficial to all the kind of people in the society as they can avoid being a victim. In the survey, it was came out that due to lack of jobs people will try to commit crime by robbing some other person for money. If the proper education is provided than a jail then such people can get employment and will lead in a correct direction, This will not only create opportunities to them but also will decrease the crime rate. In conclusion, Instead of prison for committing a crime if a country can provide such people with good education will not only reduce crimes but also decrease the poverty by having proper works.
If a person
is caught
with any of the
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crime
then he/she will
be locked
up in the prison which is quite common in all the countries.
However
, providing
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education
to these
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people
will be better solution. This essay
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agrees
with the statement as providing
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good
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education
will transform the prisoner to follow in the right path and can avoid doing such
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crimes
in the future.
Secondly
,
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some
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people
may commit
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crime
due to unemployment which can be decrease with proper education.

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rather
than putting him/she behind the bars will
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help
him to
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stop
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crimes
in the future and
also
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people
may lead as an example in the society and can
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help
others who
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got
stuck with same situation. Learning will
also
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help
to know various
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crimes
sections and
also
penalties behind that. This will
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reduce
the
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crime
rate in the country which will be beneficial to all the kind of
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people
in the society as they can avoid being a victim. In the survey, it was
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came
out that due to lack of jobs
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people
will try to commit
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crime
by robbing
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some
other person for money. If the proper
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education
is provided
than a jail then such
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people
can
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get
employment and will lead in a correct direction, This will not
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only
create opportunities to them
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but
also
will decrease the
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crime
rate.

In conclusion
,
Instead
of prison for committing a
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crime
if a country can provide such
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people
with
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good
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education
will not
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only
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reduce
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crimes
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but
also
decrease the poverty by having proper works.
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IELTS essay Prison is the common way in most countries try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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