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Prison is the common way in most countries to try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

Prison is the common way in most countries to try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. 0501
It is generally seen that admitting any sort of illegal act is panned out due to dearth of fundamental education. Both imprisonment and quality of schooling seem to be suitable course of action in alleviating crime from the society but teachings play more pivotal role. I firmly agree with this point of view. Analysing the power of education and cater to. Firstly, education has the power to change the perspective of individuals which instigate them indulging in crimes. This is due to the fact that better education programs teaches them the both wrong and right side of particular phenomenon that empower them to take decision wisely whereas it is not available in prison. They can find guilty or even more anguish, and it may increase the possibility of further committing unlawful act. For example, researches have shown the data about relationship between education and rate of crime in developing countries where the results are indirectly proportional to each other. Thus, upcoming foreseeable future, the escalating rate can be seen dipping down because pf better education such as laws, protocols and guidelines of country for crimes at an early age. Secondly, a good standard of teaching yield myriad number of employees in the country. As the majority of criminals break the law to make living. For an instance, if person have good pay scale job, he will less likely to illdoing. On the other hand, the incarnation merely provides them the opportunity to learn useful lessons that gives them certainly for job when they come out. Therefore education comes up on practical solution as they would less likely to give them reason and time for this To conclude, imprisonment would lack that position to change thoughts of misdeed and do not make that competitive enough to persue a profession to make earnings. Thus it is found to be effective remedy for the ailness of crime which is better education. As this essay has shown the figure of offenses in country may display the declination when authority invest money in education system.
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generally
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seen
that admitting any sort of illegal act
is panned
out due to dearth of fundamental
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education
. Both imprisonment and quality of schooling seem to be suitable course of action in alleviating
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crime
from the society
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but
teachings play more pivotal role. I
firmly
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agree
with this point of view.
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Analysing
the power of
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education
and cater to.

Firstly
,
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education
has the power to
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change
the perspective of individuals which instigate them indulging in
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crimes
.
This is due to the fact that
better
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education
programs teaches them the both
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wrong
and right side of particular phenomenon that empower them to take decision
wisely
whereas it is not available in prison. They can find guilty or even more anguish, and it may increase the possibility of
further
committing unlawful act.
For example
, researches have shown the data about relationship between
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education
and rate of
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crime
in developing
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countries
where the results are
indirectly
proportional to each other.
Thus
, upcoming foreseeable future, the escalating rate can be
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seen
dipping down
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because
pf better
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education
such as laws, protocols and guidelines of
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country
for
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crimes
at an early age.

Secondly
, a
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good
standard of teaching yield myriad number of employees in the
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country
.
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As
the majority of criminals break the law to
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make
living. For an instance, if person have
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good
pay scale job, he will less likely to
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illdoing
.
On the other hand
, the incarnation
merely
provides them the opportunity to learn useful lessons that gives them
certainly
for job when they
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come
out.
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Therefore
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education
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comes
up on practical solution as they would less likely to give them reason and time for
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To conclude
, imprisonment would lack that position to
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change
thoughts of misdeed and do not
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make
that competitive
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enough
to
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persue
a profession to
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make
earnings.
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Thus
it
is found
to be effective remedy for the
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ailness
of
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crime
which is better
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education
. As this essay has shown the figure of offenses in
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country
may display the declination when authority invest money in
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education
system.
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IELTS essay Prison is the common way in most countries to try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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