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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. pP3m
In a current time, becoming an all-rounder is the key to achieve success. To continue in one career throughout the life becomes very boring in the present time. The new demand is to have various career options to grow their future. Furthermore, to keep updated themselves with knowledge and education throughout life. I agree to have various career options to earn the money with further education. Firstly, if a person has only one career in the engineering field then he becomes bore by the same work throughout his life. Apart from this, if a person studies any computer programming language in his free time then he can think of career changes in the company of programming language. Furthermore, a person should enhance his knowledge by adding new information about programming language in the computer sector. Such as if he works in a company where he uses java programming language but he gained some basic skills about Oracle programming language and other multimedia programs then he can change the career option in dual language programming or multimedia sector. Thus, there are many options, how to increase the income! It can be done by doing a secondary job. Secondly, the single career option is old fashioned where people complete their daily hours at the office. In the past, there was less competition. Indeed children's education did not demand high fees. Thus, to fulfill family requirements such as children’s activities fees and their tuition fees, social functions expenses and so on, it is suggested that people should develop other skills to do the secondary job. For example, a teacher teaches computer subjects at the school, she may choose to start the computer programming job as a part time job. In conclusion, there are a plethora of ways to earn money if people educate themselves with the latest technology and enhance their knowledge of creativity. I recommend to all office staff should be educated with the latest technology. People should update with the latest trends of career options rather than stick to the same career whole life.
In a
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, becoming an all-rounder is the key to achieve success. To continue in one
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career
throughout the
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life
becomes
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very
boring in the present
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time
. The new demand is to have various
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career
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options
to grow their future.
Furthermore
, to
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keep
updated themselves with knowledge and education throughout
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life
. I
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agree
to have various
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career
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options
to earn the money with
further
education.

Firstly
, if a person has
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only
one
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career
in the engineering field then he becomes bore by the same work throughout his
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life
. Apart from this, if a person studies any computer
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programming
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language
in his free
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time
then he can
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think
of
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career
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changes
in the
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company
of
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programming
language.

Furthermore
, a person should enhance his knowledge by adding new information about
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programming
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language
in the computer sector. Such as if he works in a
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company
where he
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uses
java
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programming
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language
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but
he gained
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some
basic
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skills
about Oracle
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programming
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language
and other multimedia programs then he can
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change
the
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career
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option
in dual
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language
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programming
or multimedia sector.
Thus
, there are
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many
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options
, how to increase the income! It can
be done
by doing a secondary job.

Secondly
, the single
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career
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option
is
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old fashioned
where
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people
complete their daily hours at the office. In the past, there was less competition.
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Indeed
children's education did not demand high fees.
Thus
, to fulfill family requirements such as children’s activities fees and their tuition fees, social functions expenses and
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so
on, it
is suggested
that
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people
should develop other
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skills
to do the secondary job.
For example
, a teacher teaches computer subjects at the school, she may choose to
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start
the computer
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programming
job as a part
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time
job.

In conclusion
, there are a plethora of ways to earn money if
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people
educate themselves with the latest technology and enhance their knowledge of creativity. I recommend to all office staff should
be educated
with the latest technology.
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People
should update with the latest trends of
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career
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options
rather
than stick to the same
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career
whole
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life
.
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IELTS essay Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
343 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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