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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your answer with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words

For nine to ten months, a woman endures drastic and emotional changes during pregnancy. Because of this woman has the greatest right to decide on whether she will have child or not. I strongly disagree with the idea that woman are solely responsible for bringing children up and have right to decide whether to have babies or not. Firstly, both male and female are equally responsible for family planning. However decisions on child birth greatly affected by women's choice but there are other facrors which can be considered such as financial ability to support child's future. A father’s role is not just earning money but they Should involve in child rearing because there are activities which is suited to be done by a father such as dropping their kids to the school or playing outdoor games with them. In my country particularly in rural areas people have a mindset that man do not look after their children also they are not incharge of child care as such tasks are done by the woman. According to me people should break their traditional view that the mothers arr confined to the four walls of the home as a housewife. Modern thinking should be developed that woman will not just sit at home doing household things instead they will go out for work and earn their living. A joint agreement should be made between parents to divide their duties for example, mother would send their child to the school while fathers will be incharge of picking up the child after classes To conclude, I firmly believe that it is not a good idea to put entire child rearing work on woman. The idea of parenthood should be implemented in each and every family, neither mother nor father is solely accountable for up bringing the children, it is the job of Bonet the parents to look them.
For nine to ten months, a
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woman
endures drastic and emotional
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changes
during pregnancy.
Because of this
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woman
has the greatest right to decide on whether she will have
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child
or not. I
strongly
disagree with the
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idea
that
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woman
are
solely
responsible for bringing children up and have right to decide whether to have babies or not.

Firstly
, both male and female are
equally
responsible for family planning.
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However
decisions on
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child birth
greatly
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affected
by women's choice
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but
there are other
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facrors
which can
be considered
such as financial ability to support child's future. A
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father’s
role is not
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just
earning money
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but
they Should involve in
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child
rearing
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because
there are activities which
is suited
to
be done
by a
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father
such as dropping their kids to the school or playing outdoor games with them.

In my country
particularly
in rural areas
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people
have a mindset that
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man
do not look after their children
also
they are not
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incharge
of
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child
care as such tasks
are done
by the
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woman
.
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According to me
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people
should break their traditional view that the mothers arr confined to the four walls of the home as a housewife. Modern thinking should
be developed
that
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woman
will not
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just
sit at home doing household things
instead
they will go out for work and earn their living. A joint agreement should
be made
between parents to divide their duties
for example
, mother would
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send
their
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child
to the school while
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fathers
will be
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incharge
of picking up the
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child
after
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classes


To conclude
, I
firmly
believe that it is not a
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good
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idea
to put entire
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child
rearing work on
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woman
. The
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idea
of parenthood should
be implemented
in each and every family, neither mother nor
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father
is
solely
accountable for up bringing the children, it is the job of
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Bonet
the parents to look them.

IELTS essay Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. with the statement? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your answer with examples and relevant evidence.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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