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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your answer with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words

For nine to ten months, a woman endures drastic and emotional changes during pregnancy. Because of this woman has the greatest right to decide on whether she will have child or not. I strongly disagree with the idea that woman are solely responsible for bringing children up and have right to decide whether to have babies or not. Firstly, both male and female are equally responsible for family planning. However decisions on child birth greatly affected by women's choice but there are other facrors which can be considered such as financial ability to support child's future. A father’s role is not just earning money but they Should involve in child rearing because there are activities which is suited to be done by a father such as dropping their kids to the school or playing outdoor games with them. In my country particularly in rural areas people have a mindset that man do not look after their children also they are not incharge of child care as such tasks are done by the woman. According to me people should break their traditional view that the mothers arr confined to the four walls of the home as a housewife. Modern thinking should be developed that woman will not just sit at home doing household things instead they will go out for work and earn their living. A joint agreement should be made between parents to divide their duties for example, mother would send their child to the school while fathers will be incharge of picking up the child after classes To conclude, I firmly believe that it is not a good idea to put entire child rearing work on woman. The idea of parenthood should be implemented in each and every family, neither mother nor father is solely accountable for up bringing the children, it is the job of Bonet the parents to look them.

For nine to ten months, a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermothershe
woman
 endures drastic and emotional This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 during pregnancy. Because of this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermothershe
woman
 has the greatest right to decide on whether she will have You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
child
 or not. I strongly
 disagree with the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
 that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermothershe
woman
 are solely
 responsible for bringing children up and have right to decide whether to have babies or not.

Firstly
, both male and female are equally
 responsible for family planning. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 decisions on This word is normally spelled as one.childbirth
child birth
greatly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :impacted
affected
 by women's choice This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 there are other Possible spelling mistake found.factors
facrors
 which can be considered
 such as financial ability to support child's future. A You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
father’s
 role is not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 earning money This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 they Should involve in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
child
 rearing This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 there are activities which is suited
 to be done
 by a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
father
 such as dropping their kids to the school or playing outdoor games with them.

In my country particularly
 in rural areas This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 have a mindset that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualresidentcitizen
man
 do not look after their children also
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incharge
 of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
child
 care as such tasks are done
 by the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermothershe
woman
. This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using “in my opinion” or “I think”.In my opinionI think
According to me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 should break their traditional view that the mothers arr confined to the four walls of the home as a housewife. Modern thinking should be developed
 that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermothershe
woman
 will not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 sit at home doing household things instead
 they will go out for work and earn their living. A joint agreement should be made
 between parents to divide their duties for example
, mother would This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
child
 to the school while You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
fathers
 will be Possible spelling mistake found.in charge
incharge
 of picking up the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
child
 after Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph.classes.classes!classes?classes:classes,classes;
classes


To conclude
, I firmly
 believe that it is not a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
 to put entire You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
child
 rearing work on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermothershe
woman
. The This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
 of parenthood should be implemented
 in each and every family, neither mother nor You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdadpredecessorancestorparent
father
 is solely
 accountable for up bringing the children, it is the job of Possible spelling mistake found.BoneBonesBonnetMonetBenetBoned
Bonet
 the parents to look them. 