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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic. Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic. Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. pQxw
Nowadays, vaccinating is important for everyone because diseases are spreading at high speed. The number of young people diseases should be cured by vaccination. however, several people think that it is their own choice either they want their child vaccinated or not. According to my opinion, the government ought to make a rule that it's mandatory for every parent to get immunized their child against frequent diseases. firstly, children's immune system is weak due to this fact vaccination against the most occurring infections should be provided to them by the government in their early stages. So that offspring life should be saved. In addition to this, vaccination methods generate antibodies in human beings which prepared them to deal with various types of sickness. The governing body of the nation has to set the vaccination methods at which time the child has to come for injections. for example, typhoid injections are essential in the early stages of youths so that risk of losing a life should be reduced. secondly, there are chances of losing the children life if we gave responsibility to individuals themself. In the modern era, life is so busy and hectic. their are possibilities that parents may pay less attention to their youngster's immunization. Moreover, some people think vaccination against harmful diseases are just invented to get money from them as there is no need to treat with vaccine child is taking regular meals. in conclusion, I strongly believe that law should be implemented to provide proper vaccination to every child time to time. It is necessary that children must be prevented from spreading of diseases because we know that they are the future of the country.
Nowadays, vaccinating is
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important
for everyone
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because
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diseases
are spreading at high speed. The number of young
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people
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diseases
should
be cured
by vaccination.
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however
, several
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people
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think
that it is their
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own
choice either they want their
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child
vaccinated or not. According to my opinion, the
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government
ought to
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make
a
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rule
that it's mandatory for every parent to
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get
immunized their
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child
against frequent diseases.

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firstly
, children's immune system is weak due to this fact vaccination against the most occurring infections should
be provided
to them by the
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government
in their early stages.
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So that
offspring
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life
should
be saved
.
In addition
to this, vaccination methods generate antibodies in human beings which prepared them to deal with various types of sickness. The governing body of the nation
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has to
set the vaccination methods at which time the
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child
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has to
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come
for injections.
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for
example, typhoid injections are essential in the early stages of youths
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so
that
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risk
of losing a
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life
should be
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reduced
.

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secondly
, there are chances of losing the children
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life
if we gave responsibility to individuals
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themself
. In the modern era,
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life
is
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so
busy and hectic.
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their
are possibilities that parents may pay less attention to their youngster's immunization.
Moreover
,
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some
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people
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think
vaccination against harmful
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diseases
are
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just
invented to
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get
money from them as there is no need to treat with vaccine
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child
is taking regular meals.

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in
conclusion, I
strongly
believe that law should
be implemented
to provide proper vaccination to every
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child
time to time. It is necessary that children
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must
be
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prevented
from spreading of
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diseases
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because
we know that they are the future of the country.
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IELTS essay Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic. Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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